Question

1．請你以Jane Goodall為題寫一篇短文，詞數(shù)120左右．內容要點如下：
1．著名的動物學家（zoologist）Jane Goodall，1934年出生于英國，畢業(yè)于劍橋（ Cambridge University） 大學．
2．她從小就夢想在自然環(huán)境中研究動物并于1960年去非洲研究黑猩猩（chimps）．
3．取得的成就：
1）在Jane Goodall 之前，沒有人完全了解猩猩的行為：吃肉；一起狩獵；像家庭成員一樣交流，生活；
2）幫助建立動物自然棲息地；
3）獲得許多榮譽（ honours ）．
注意：不要逐字翻譯，可以適當增加細節(jié)．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱類的作文，是以Jane Goodall為題寫一篇短文，屬于寫人的英語作文，寫作時根據(jù)具體要求不要逐句翻譯，可適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫同時要把所提示的要點寫全，語句通順，同時注意準確運用時態(tài)、語態(tài)、上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系．根據(jù)句意適當使用并列連詞，同時也要合理運用高級詞匯和高級句子為文章增色添彩．
  亮點說明：Jane Goodall，born in England in 1934，was a world famous zoologist，who graduated from Cambridge University．句中運用非限制性定語從句；
       Since her childhood she had wanted to work with animals in their natural environment．過去完成時（本來想做某事）的使用非常經典；
     She found that chimps hunt and eat meat．She also discovered how chimps communicate with each other．連續(xù)兩個賓語從句
   Having devoted all her time to studying chimps，Jane Goodall gained many honours．現(xiàn)在分詞完成式做狀語

解答 Jane Goodall，born in England in 1934，was a world famous zoologist，who graduated from Cambridge University．（高分句型）Since her childhood she had wanted to work with animals in their natural environment．（高分句型）In 1960，she achieved her dream-she arrived in Africa to study the chimps．
Nobody before Jane fully understood chimp behavior．She found that chimps hunt and eat meat．She also discovered how chimps communicate with each other．She argued that wild animals should be left in the wild．Thanks to her help，some special reserves have been set up，where chimps can live safely．（高分句型）
Having devoted all her time to studying chimps，Jane Goodall gained many honours．（高分句型）Her spirit inspires many people．

點評 應該注意適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當選用表示因果、遞進、轉折關系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復使用句式相同的簡單句而造成的單調感．（1）認真審題，確定體裁． （2）構思要點．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達的要點．設計好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時態(tài)、人稱等，把要點串聯(lián)起來，構成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認真檢查，避免錯誤．仔細閱讀全文，查找是否有錯，注意時態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標點是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．