Question

【題目】隨著經(jīng)濟的發(fā)展，越來越多的家庭擁有小汽車，因此，放學時，家長接學生的車輛總會導致校門口的交通過度擁擠，學校對此非�？鄲�。假如你是高三年級的學生李津，請給張校長寫一封信，分析一下該現(xiàn)象產(chǎn)生的原因以及潛在的危險，并提出你的建議：

1.鼓勵同學們坐公交車或者選擇共享單車上學；環(huán)保便捷；

2.提醒家長有序停車；

3.各年級可以分時間放學。

注意：詞數(shù)100左右；開頭已給出，不計入詞數(shù)。（共享單車Bicycle-sharing）

Mr. Zhang,

I’m writing to you to share my opinions about the problem of heavy traffic every day after school at our gate.

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Yours,

Li Jin

Answer 1

【答案】Mr. Zhang,

I’m writing to you to share my opinions about the problem of heavy traffic every day after school at our school gate.

With the development of economy, more and more families begin to have cars of their own, which contributes partly to the problem. Besides, some parents always try to park their cars as close as possible to the school gate, without taking anything else into consideration.

In order to solve it, I firmly hold the view that some effective measures must be taken. First, I think it necessary to call on all the students to go back home by bus or by bike. Second, if they have to be picked up by their parents by car, they’d better remind their parents to park their cars in proper places. Finally, it might be helpful to make students of different grades leave school at different times.

I hope my suggestions will be useful to help solve the problem.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Jin

【解析】這是一篇書信類作文。同學們在寫這篇文章時，

要注意以下幾點：

1. 是讓學生分析一下上面的現(xiàn)象產(chǎn)生的原因以及潛在的危險，所以通篇的主要時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)最好。

2. 文章的要點也基本上都給出來了：1.鼓勵同學們坐公交車或者選擇共享單車上學；環(huán)保便捷；2.提醒家長有序停車；3.各年級可以分時間放學�？忌�要把要點全交代，并結(jié)合自己的生活經(jīng)驗把這些建議寫具體。

3.要拓展內(nèi)容，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。

【范文亮點】

1.一些高級短語和連接詞的使用如： taking anything else into consideration. First，second， Besides

2.With the development of economy, more and more families begin to have cars of their own, which contributes partly to the problem. which引導的非限制性定語從句。

I firmly hold the view that some effective measures must be taken. that引導的同位語從句

3.if they have to be picked up by their parents by car, they’d better remind their parents to park their cars in proper places. if引導的條件狀語從句

4.it might be helpful to make students of different grades leave school at different times. It作形式主語，真正的主語是to make students of different grades leave school at different times.