Question

【題目】閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。

I was on a tour of Italy with my friends. Our car pulled to a stop at the beach. I got out, carrying my guitar and saw the blue Adriatic Sea. Waves smashed(撞擊) against large rocks that formed a jetty(防波堤). People said this beach was known for its fierce undertow(回流). I trembled. Nothing frightened me as much as water.

I’d always loved water and been a good swimmer until last summer, when I'd decided to climb up to the highest diving board at a city pool. I'd jumped into the water. The next thing I knew was my brother was pulling me out of the pool. From then on, I stayed away from the water.

“Kevin, are you coming? " My friend Brad called.

“Yeah,” I said. "Just enjoying the view.” From dry land, I added silently.

Just then I heard shouting. People were running into the sea.

I saw something moving up and down amid the waves. There was a little boy out there! The rescuers were fighting against the tide(潮水). They’d never get to him in time. They might not get to him at all with the undertow.

I looked back at the boy. His head popped up, then a wave crashed over him and he disappeared for a moment. I had to do something.

The jetty! The boy was close to it. From there maybe I could help. I raced down the beach, out onto the jetty, and it hit me: Water! My hands got sweaty and I felt sick to my stomach. I stopped short.

The people in the water weren't making any headway against the waves. I was the only one who saw that going out onto the jetty was the fastest way to reach the drowning boy. Though I was as terrified as he, I tried to remember the life guard training I’d had as a teenager.

Sucking in(吸氣) a deep breath, I threw myself into the water. As soon as I went under it, I felt like I was back in that city pool, breathless, struggling. Focus, I shouted in my head. Where is he？

注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；

3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；

4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。

Paragraph 1:

Then I saw it---a thin arm waving weakly a few yards away.

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Paragraph 2:

Brad jumped into the water

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Answer 1

【答案】Then I saw it a thin arm waving weakly a few yards away. I reached the boy and held him just as he sank below the surface. I pulled as hard as I could."Calm down!" I told the boy. When I turned back toward the shore, a wave crashed over us. The jetty was about 50 yards away. The undertow! It was pushing us to sea. I remembered what I d learned in my lifeguard training. We slowly made our way to safety. Then I realized something amazing: I was no longer terrified

Brad jumped into the water. I pushed the boy toward him. Just as I let go, a big wave picked him up and carried him all the way to Brad. I stopped fighting, and just let myself go. My hand hit the jetty. Someone pulled me out of the sea onto the rocks. When I caught my breath, I turned my head and saw the boy being hugged tightly by his mother. I looked out at the sea. Never before had water looked so beautiful to me.

【解析】

本篇書面表達屬于讀后續(xù)寫。

文章已經(jīng)給出的部分講述了一段故事，為了完整且自然地完成這個故事，需要理清文章大意和敘事脈絡(luò)，可以總結(jié)如下：

作者（名為Kevin）和朋友們?nèi)ヒ獯罄�玩，在一片沙灘旁邊駐足，卻目睹了海上有一個小男孩正遭遇險情，作者沖到防波堤旁準(zhǔn)備入水施救，卻感到十分害怕（前文交代了他曾有過溺水被救的經(jīng)歷因而非常怕水）。在所給文段的最后，作者鼓足了勇氣跳入海中，尋找落水的男孩，續(xù)寫部分就從這里開始。

續(xù)寫第一段所給內(nèi)容是“然后我看到了——就在不遠(yuǎn)處水面上有一條瘦小的胳膊在無力的揮舞著”，也就是作者看到了落水男孩，這一段的內(nèi)容應(yīng)該圍繞作者如何施救、如何克服內(nèi)心恐懼展開，并盡量用上文中劃線的關(guān)鍵詞，可以寫作：I reached the boy and held him just as he sank below the surface. I pulled as hard as I could."Calm down!" I told the boy. When I turned back toward the shore, a wave crashed over us. The jetty was about 50 yards away. The undertow! It was pushing us to sea. I remembered what I d learned in my lifeguard training. We slowly made our way to safety. Then I realized something amazing: I was no longer terrified.

續(xù)寫第二段所給內(nèi)容是“Brad跳入了水中”，Brad是作者同行的朋友之一，顯然這里指他也參與到施救工作中來，所以內(nèi)容應(yīng)該是兩人合力將男孩救上了岸，制造一個較為圓滿的結(jié)局，可以寫作：I pushed the boy toward him. Just as I let go, a big wave picked him up and carried him all the way to Brad. I stopped fighting, and just let myself go. My hand hit the jetty. Someone pulled me out of the sea onto the rocks. When I caught my breath, I turned my head and saw the boy being hugged tightly by his mother. I looked out at the sea. Never before had water looked so beautiful to me.