Question

【題目】假定你是某國際學(xué)校的學(xué)生李華。最近，你校打算為同學(xué)們制作統(tǒng)一的校服，請你給外籍校長威爾遜先生寫一封建議信，要點如下：

1. 寫信的目的：

2. 對校服布料、款式等提出建議并說明理由。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Mr. Wilson,

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Mr. Wilson,

I am writing to make some suggestions on our new uniform.

Our uniform is worn nearly every day, so it would be great if you could understand what students like. First of all, I’d prefer it to be made cotton because cotton feels soft and is good for our skin. Second, I’m tired of seeing the same clothes everywhere at school, so please let boys and girls have different uniforms. Third, I suggest that you provide four or five styles for us to choose from. All students can vote and choose their favorite styles.

I’d be honored if you could take my suggestions into consideration.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本文是提綱類寫作，要點已給出，寫作時要結(jié)合自身對校服的看法，表達(dá)出對校服的要求。成文時要注意：1.文章主要用第一人稱；2.時態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時為主；3.文章的內(nèi)容要點要齊全：（1）寫信的目的；（2）對校服布料、款式等提出建議并說明理由。4.注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，以提高文章的檔次；5.注意使用一些連接詞，使得文章表達(dá)自然、流暢。6.注意文章的字?jǐn)?shù)控制，120單詞左右。7.不能使用原文語句。

亮點說明：本文是一篇英文書信。書信格式正確，要點齊全，層次分明，布局合理，運用高級句子。Our uniform is worn nearly every day, so it would be great if you could understand what students like.被動語態(tài)、并列句和賓語從句完美結(jié)合；I’d prefer it to be made cotton because cotton feels soft and is good for our skin.句中使用原因狀語從句；Third, I suggest that you provide four or five styles for us to choose from. All students can vote and choose their favorite styles.suggest后面用含虛擬語氣的賓語從句（should）+動詞原形；I’d be honored if you could take my suggestions into consideration.被動語態(tài)和if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句出現(xiàn)在句中；另外，F(xiàn)irst of all, Second, Third,為文章增色添彩。