Question

【題目】李華是生活在某個(gè)社區(qū)的孩子，她感到孩子們的社區(qū)生活單調(diào)，幾乎沒有朋友，于是打算向社區(qū)負(fù)責(zé)人黃叔叔提出解決該問題的建議。請(qǐng)你就此事以李華的名義寫一篇 100 詞左右的郵件。

內(nèi)容包括：

1. 組織社區(qū)里的孩子參加清潔本小區(qū)的勞動(dòng)。

2. 提供一個(gè)固定場(chǎng)所供孩子們課后學(xué)習(xí)和交流。

3. 鼓勵(lì)孩子們加入社區(qū)足球俱樂部并安排比賽。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 信的開頭與結(jié)尾已為你寫好。

Dear Mr. Huang,

I am Li Hua, a child living in this community.______________________________

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Best wishes!

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Uncle Huang,

I am Li Hua, a child living in this community. Most of the children in our community feel lonely and bored because we have few friends here. To change this situation, I’d like to offer some suggestions.

First, would you please organize the children to clean up our neighborhood regularly? Through this activivty , we can know each other and make new friends. Second, I wonder if you could find us a room to do our homework so that we can help and learn from each other. Third, I think it’s a good idea to encourage children to join the community’s football club and arrange some matches.

I hope we can get more involved in our community and our life will be colorful and full of fun.

Best wished!

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，我們需要用正確的英語把給出的要點(diǎn)表達(dá)出來。動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)比較具體，故需要準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)。寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】范文運(yùn)用一些常見的短語make new friends交朋友；learn from從……中學(xué)習(xí)；encourage sb to do 鼓勵(lì)某人做某事；get involved in 參與；I am Li Hua, a child living in this community.這個(gè)句子運(yùn)用到現(xiàn)在分詞作后置定語；To change this situation, I’d like to offer some suggestions這個(gè)句子中運(yùn)用到不定式作目的狀語；Second, I wonder if you could find us a room to do our homework so that we can help and learn from each other.這個(gè)句子中運(yùn)用到if引導(dǎo)的賓語從句。