Question

我校一年一度的秋季運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)即將來(lái)臨，現(xiàn)請(qǐng)以“Positive and Negative Aspects of Sports " 為題寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文，內(nèi)容包括：
1． 體育運(yùn)動(dòng)的好處；
2． 過(guò)度的體育運(yùn)動(dòng)可能帶來(lái)的副作用；
3． 作為一名運(yùn)員你對(duì)體育運(yùn)動(dòng)的看法
注意：1.詞數(shù)：120詞左右；
2.可以適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，以使內(nèi)容充實(shí)，行文連貫。
3.可能用到的詞：過(guò)度的體育運(yùn)動(dòng)excessive sports
副作用side effective
Positive and Negative Aspects of Sports
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Answer 1

Sports do us good in many respects. It goes without saying that taking exercises can build up our physical strength. In collective sports like basketball, volleyball, or football, we will learn the importance of cooperation. While taking part in sports game, we will try our best to win and arouse ourselves the competitive spirit. Sports can also help us relax after a period of exhausting work.
However, as the saying goes, "there are two sides to everything", and sports is without exception. We may hurt other players or ourselves if we are not careful enough when participating in sports activities.What's more, excessive or severe training can do harm to our health
My participation in sports tells me that sports can make us healthy both physically and psychologically. It is also a good way for people to know each other and can promote friendship between people. So long as we are careful enough, sports can do us nothing but good.

試題分析：這是闡述優(yōu)缺點(diǎn)的議論文，話題是運(yùn)動(dòng)的好壞的問(wèn)題。這種文章一般層次比較清晰，有總述；優(yōu)點(diǎn)和缺點(diǎn)以及自己觀點(diǎn)。要注意的是1.在列舉雙方依據(jù)時(shí)要盡量使語(yǔ)言多樣化；2.自我觀點(diǎn)表達(dá)時(shí)要有正確的判斷，要有辯證的思維。一篇文章需要有正確的句子才能明了清晰的表達(dá)作者的意思�？忌鷳�(yīng)明白高考書(shū)面表達(dá)題既不是漢譯英，也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求的是將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開(kāi)思維，考查運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語(yǔ)知識(shí)準(zhǔn)確地表達(dá)意思的能力�？忌鷳�(yīng)該用自己最熟悉、最有把握的詞、短語(yǔ)及句式，按一定的邏輯順序和意義層次完成短文，劃分好文章的自然段落，注意段落之間的發(fā)展和連貫。盡量使用不同長(zhǎng)度的句子，使句型多樣化。適當(dāng)使用連詞，使句子間的銜接自然流暢。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文要點(diǎn)全面，有運(yùn)動(dòng)的優(yōu)點(diǎn)也有缺點(diǎn)，還有自己的觀點(diǎn)，句式多變：While taking part in sports game, we will try our best to win and arouse ourselves the competitive spirit.這句話用了省略句， as the saying goes, "there are two sides to everything", and sports is without exception. 這句話用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，We may hurt other players or ourselves if we are not careful enough when participating in sports activities.這句話里面既有條件狀語(yǔ)從句也有時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句的省略， It is also a good way for people to know each other and can promote friendship between people.這句話用了it做形式主語(yǔ)， So long as we are careful enough, sports can do us nothing but good. 這句話里面用so long as引導(dǎo)條件狀語(yǔ)從句，還有文章還用了However, What's more,這樣的詞使文章更加連貫。