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15．假設你是紅星中學高三（1）班學生李華．最近你和同學組織了"文明使用共享單車"的活動，請根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，給�？�"英語角"寫一篇稿件介紹你們的活動過程．注意：詞數(shù)不少于60．
提示詞：1．civilized 文明的
2．leaflets 宣傳單

Recently，the increasing popularity of shared bikes has made our lives more convenient．However，my classmates and I often noticedsome shared bikesplaced messily everywhere．We felt upsetand decided to make a change to the uncivilizedbehavior．
First，we had a heated discussion about the problem at our class meeting．We shared our ideas and came up with a great plan．After making full preparations，we startedto take action．
On Saturday morning，we gathered outside the subway station near our school．Firstly，we began with those messy shared bikesthere and tried to put themin order．People passing by all appreciated what we did．Seeing the bikes in rows on the pavement，we really felt excited．Then，in order to encourage people's civilized behavior，weput upa poster saying"PLEASE BE CIVILIZED WHILE USING A SHARED BIKE"．Meanwhile，some of us helped to give out leaflets．Of course，we drew much attention from the passers-by．Hopefully our action would make a difference．
This experience actually inspires me a lot．The idea of sharing requires people's awareness of civilization．When the uncivilized behavior occurs，it is our duty to do our best to stop it．I strongly believe that in this way our society will become better and better．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于圖畫類作文，根據(jù)提示信息最近你和同學組織了"文明使用共享單車"的活動，請根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，給�？�"英語角"寫一篇稿件介紹你們的活動過程．寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，2、要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照所給的順序寫．3、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
（高分句型一）my classmates and I often noticed some shared bikes placed messily everywhere．
該句使用了notice sth done結構，看到…被…看到共享單車被放的論七八糟‘'
（高分句型二）Seeing the bikes in rows on the pavement，we really felt excited．
seeing是非謂語結構，即現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語，和句子的主語we是主動關系；
高級詞匯：came up with提出；take action采取行動；it is our duty to…做某事是我們的職責…

解答 Recently，the increasing popularity of shared bikes has made our lives more convenient．However，（高分句型一）my classmates and I often noticed some shared bikes placed messily everywhere．（圖一內(nèi)容）We felt upset and decided to make a change to the uncivilized behavior．
    First，（圖二內(nèi)容）we had a heated discussion about the problem at our class meeting．We shared our ideas and came up with a great plan．After making full preparations，we started to take action．
    On Saturday morning，we gathered outside the subway station near our school．Firstly，（圖三內(nèi)容）we began with those messy shared bikes there and tried to put them in order．People passing by all appreciated what we did．（高分句型二）Seeing the bikes in rows on the pavement，we really felt excited．Then，in order to encourage people's civilized behavior，（圖四內(nèi)容）we put up a poster saying"PLEASE BE CIVILIZED WHILE USING A SHARED BIKE"．Meanwhile，some of us helped to give out leaflets．Of course，we drew much attention from the passers-by．Hopefully our action would make a difference．
    This experience actually inspires me a lot．The idea of sharing requires people's awareness of civilization．When the uncivilized behavior occurs，it is our duty to do our best to stop it．I strongly believe that in this way our society will become better and better．

點評 這類文章書寫時，需要做到脈絡清晰，并且觀點明確，理由得當．首先審題，明白文章的話題主要是什么，也就是整篇文章的中心，其次就是要抓住題目給出的主要內(nèi)容，這也就是給文章的主要脈絡進行了定格，所以這類文章在書寫時，對于預言邏輯能力的運用能力，詞匯和句型的使用能力，文章連接的高要求較高，同時學生在書寫時，對于字數(shù)也要進行適當?shù)目刂疲?/p>