Question

14．假如你是李華，針對你市目前的交通堵塞問題，給市長寫一封信，提出自己的建議．要點如下：
1．私家車增多和司機的違規(guī)行駛造成交通堵塞；
2．提出具體的解決辦法；
3．希望市長予以答復(fù)．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；   2．可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
參考詞匯：混亂chaos；車道lane；停車場parking lot
Dear Mayor，
I'm writing to give some suggestions to improve our city's transportation．
Dear Mayor，
I'm writing to give some suggestions to improve our city's transportation．
At present，traffic jams have become a major problem faced by most people of our city every day．（高分句型）The number of private cars has been increasing．What's more，some drivers disobey traffic rules，causing traffic chaos．（高分句型）All this often results in traffic jams．
In my opinion，measures must be taken to solve this problem．First，the government should encourage people to use public transport more and at the same time limit private cars．Second，more lanes and parking lots should be built．Third，it's important to educate the public to obey traffic rules．
I would appreciate it if you could take my suggestions into consideration．（高分句型）I'm looking forward to your reply．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱類作文．假如你是李華，針對你市目前的交通堵塞問題，給市長寫一封信，提出自己的建議．要點如下：1．私家車增多和司機的違規(guī)行駛造成交通堵塞；2．提出具體的解決辦法；
3．希望市長予以答復(fù)．需要寫的內(nèi)容已經(jīng)粗略給出，需要我們翻譯成完整通順的句子，適當(dāng)添加些內(nèi)容，使文章更充實．寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題．一定要給出自己的看法．盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型為文章潤色．注意要求的詞數(shù)100詞左右，不要太多也不要太少．
【亮點說明】What's more，some drivers disobey traffic rules，causing traffic chaos．這里現(xiàn)在分詞作結(jié)果狀語．I would appreciate it if you could take my suggestions into consideration．這里的句型I would appreciate it if用的很好．

解答 One possible version：
Dear Mayor，
I'm writing to give some suggestions to improve our city's transportation．
At present，traffic jams have become a major problem faced by most people of our city every day．（高分句型）The number of private cars has been increasing．What's more，some drivers disobey traffic rules，causing traffic chaos．（高分句型）All this often results in traffic jams．
In my opinion，measures must be taken to solve this problem．First，the government should encourage people to use public transport more and at the same time limit private cars．Second，more lanes and parking lots should be built．Third，it's important to educate the public to obey traffic rules．
I would appreciate it if you could take my suggestions into consideration．（高分句型）I'm looking forward to your reply．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

點評 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達的要點．設(shè)計好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時態(tài)、人稱等，把要點串聯(lián)起來，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認真檢查，避免錯誤．仔細閱讀全文，查找是否有錯，注意時態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標點是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．