Question

【題目】手機給我們帶來了很多便利的同時也帶來了“低頭族（phubber)”現(xiàn)象。請你表述低頭族現(xiàn)象并發(fā)表看法。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)：100左右。

2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】Mobile phones bring us much convenience and have become part of our life. However, more and more phubbers, especially young people, would like to stare at their screen anytime and anywhere, whether they are riding on a bus, eating at dinner table or walking across the street. They never care about what happens around.

As far as I am concerned, the habit of phubbing has many disadvantages. First, it does harm to people’s health, especially their eyes. Besides, phubbing is also dangerous while people are crossing the street. What’s more, on some occasions, such as at dinner table, phubbing seems impolite to others.

In a word, people should make good use of mobile phones instead of becoming addicted to phubbing.

【解析】

本篇書面表達屬于議論文，要求考生寫一篇議論文，表述手機帶來的低頭族現(xiàn)象并發(fā)表看法。

第一步：審題

體裁：議論文

時態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時和一般將來時。

結(jié)構(gòu)：分總法

第一段引出話題：低頭族現(xiàn)象；第二段描述個人看法；第三段總結(jié)，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。

要求：1.描述現(xiàn)象（bring us much convenience；more and more phubbers）

2.發(fā)表看法（disadvantages）

1）弊端一（harm to health）

2）弊端二（dangerous）

3）弊端三（impolite）

3.總結(jié)

第二步:列提綱 （重點詞組）

bring sb. convenience; stare at; care about; do harm to; make good use of; become addicted to

第三步：連詞成句

1. Mobile phones bring us much convenience and have become part of our life.

2. However, more and more phubbers, especially young people, would like to stare at their screen anytime and anywhere.

3. They never care about what happens around.

4. First, it does harm to people’s health, especially their eyes.

5. In a word, people should make good use of mobile phones instead of becoming addicted to phubbing.

根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：first of all;firstly/first; secondly/second…; at last

2.表并列補充關(guān)系：what is more; besides; moreover; furthermore; in addition

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對比關(guān)系：however; on the contrary; but

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，

第五步：潤色修改