Question

假定你是星光中學(xué)的高中畢業(yè)生李華，母校將為高一新生舉辦主題為“What to learn in senior high school?”的英語(yǔ)沙龍活動(dòng)，特邀請(qǐng)你結(jié)合自身經(jīng)歷談?wù)勛约旱捏w會(huì)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示準(zhǔn)備一份英語(yǔ)發(fā)言稿。

1．學(xué)會(huì)學(xué)習(xí)：方法，習(xí)慣等；

2．學(xué)會(huì)做人：真誠(chéng)，友善；

3．學(xué)會(huì)其他：考生自擬。

注意：1．詞數(shù)120左右；

2．發(fā)言稿開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不須抄在答題卡上，不計(jì)入總次數(shù)。

Good morning, everyone! It is my honor to be here to share with you my opinions on learn in senior high school．

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Thank you!

Answer 1

One possible version：

Good morning, everyone! It is my honor to be here to share with you my opinions on what to learn in senior high school．

In the coming three years, our school life will be challenging. Firstly, we should learn to learn efficiently. Personally, I used to try effective methods to achieve my academic goals. Developing a good habit is also of importance．It really benefited me a lot to preview lessons, get actively involved in class, and review what had been taught after class．

In addition, we should learn how to get along well with others. In school, I respected teachers and was friendly with classmates. It was with sincerity and faithfulness that we created a harmonious atmosphere．

Finally, we should take part in sports and outdoor activities frequently. They were really helpful to build up my body and enrich my school life．

No pains no gains, I am sure that with your great efforts, you will enjoy a colorful and fruitful life here．

Thank you.

【解析】

試題分析：

根據(jù)提示可知本篇作文為發(fā)言稿類型。一般在考試中發(fā)言稿類作文的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾都已給出，所以相比于書信類文章，發(fā)言稿類作文對(duì)格式?jīng)]有很多要求。學(xué)生需要注意的是發(fā)言稿的主題和發(fā)言的要點(diǎn)。分析題干可知這篇作文的主題是“What to learn in senior high school?”，發(fā)言的要點(diǎn)包括“學(xué)習(xí)；做人和其他”，關(guān)于第三點(diǎn)的描述，鼓勵(lì)學(xué)生在熟悉的基礎(chǔ)上多用高級(jí)詞匯和結(jié)構(gòu)復(fù)雜的復(fù)雜句，自由發(fā)揮。在行文結(jié)構(gòu)中，第一段要對(duì)直接引出話題，開(kāi)門見(jiàn)山地表明自己的發(fā)言主題。在全文的寫作中要注意選用比較有把握的詞匯，用恰當(dāng)?shù)木湫蛯懗龃_切反映內(nèi)容要求的句子。如第一段It is my honor to be here to share with you my opinions on what to learn in senior high school．一句話就概括了材料大意。之后的部分就是分條闡明自己的觀點(diǎn)，注意邏輯性和層次感。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】

在這篇范文中，文章的層次感和邏輯性非常強(qiáng)，由Firstly, In addition和Finally很清晰地表明了文章的層次，同時(shí)也是表明觀點(diǎn)的暗示，極大地方便了閱卷老師的閱卷過(guò)程。其次，在描述三個(gè)發(fā)言要點(diǎn)的過(guò)程中長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，如長(zhǎng)句It really benefited me a lot to preview lessons, get actively involved in class, and review what had been taught after class和o pains no gains, I am sure that with your great efforts, you will enjoy a colorful and fruitful life here等，短句Firstly, we should learn to learn efficiently；In addition, we should learn how to get along well with others；Finally, we should take part in sports and outdoor activities frequently. 作者選擇用短句表達(dá)發(fā)言的要點(diǎn)，簡(jiǎn)單明了。然后適當(dāng)用長(zhǎng)句拓展補(bǔ)充觀點(diǎn)。在這些長(zhǎng)短句中，句型變化不單一，固定搭配使用靈活，如動(dòng)名詞作主語(yǔ)Developing a good habit is also of importance；強(qiáng)調(diào)句It was with sincerity and faithfulness that we created a harmonious atmosphere.尤其是最后一句I am sure that with your great efforts, you will enjoy a colorful and fruitful life here既有that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，賓語(yǔ)從句中還體現(xiàn)了with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)作條件狀語(yǔ)。句式靈活多變，體現(xiàn)了作者深厚的文字功底。