Question

為配合你市開展的“創(chuàng)建文明城市”活動，用英語寫一篇短文倡議同學們做個文明的好學生。

【寫作內(nèi)容】

活動目的：配合“創(chuàng)建文明城市”活動 活動對象：全校學生 活動內(nèi)容：衣著整潔 使用禮貌用語(謝謝、請等)，不說臟話 樂于助人 注重言行，公共場所不大聲說笑 與別人建立良好的關系 遵守交通規(guī)則、在公交車上主動為老人及帶小孩的乘客讓座 保持環(huán)境衛(wèi)生

參考詞匯：文明城市 civilized city

【寫作要求】

只能使用5個句子表達全部內(nèi)容。

【評分標準】

句子結構準確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結構連貫。

Answer 1

In order to play a supporting role in building a civilized city, we students should try our best to behave well inside and outside of school. It’s good-mannered to say “Thank you”, “Please” and so on, and never say dirty words. And wherever we are, it’s a good habit to keep our clothes clean and tidy, and not throw litter or spit around so as to protect the environment. Be friendly to others, always ready to help the people in need and not talk loudly in public, which is really helpful for us to establish a good relationship with others. Besides, we should also obey traffic rules and give our seats to the old and people with babies when taking a bus.

【解析】

試題分析：本次作文為任務型作文，要求寫一篇倡議書。寫作要點要求明確，且要求只能使用5個句子表達全部內(nèi)容。故既要完成任務，又要兼顧形式的要求。

寫作亮點：本篇范文成功地使用5個句子完成了寫作任務，要點全面，結構連貫。其句式上的變化既使得文章生動而流暢，也體現(xiàn)了作者駕馭句式的能力。例如：it為形式主語“It’s good-mannered to say “Thank you”, “Please” and so on, and never say dirty words.”；狀語從句“wherever we are,”；定語從句“which is really helpful for us to establish a good relationship with others.”總之，該文可稱之為：短小精悍！