Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是生李華。你的英國朋友Smith給你發(fā)來電子郵件，詢問你們學(xué)校正在開展的綠化校園的“最美校園”活動。請你根據(jù)以下提示，回一封電子郵件。

內(nèi)容包括：1.活動的目的和內(nèi)容；

2.活動的意義。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3.請務(wù)必按規(guī)范書寫，確保整潔。

參考詞匯：最美校園活動the Most Beautiful Campus Campaign

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Yours ,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Smith,

Nowadays, with damage to the environment getting more and more serious, pollution has become a wide concern for us. As far as I am concerned, it’s high time that we took some measures to protect the environment.

There are many things we can do to protect the environment. We can recycle some useful garbage before they are thrown away and put the harmful in a safe place. We can reclean smoke and waste water before they go into the air or the rivers. What’s more, we have every reason to make full use of natural resources, or we will be in great damage very soon.

To save the environment is to save ourselves. Only when everyone becomes fully conscious how important it is to protect the earth and takes effective measures to safeguard it, can we gain sustainable development with a bright future to greet.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本文為提綱式作文，主要向英國朋友發(fā)一電子郵件來回答關(guān)于學(xué)校正在開展的綠化校園的“最美校園”活動。提綱式作文的寫作主要分三步：

第一步：審題，確定體裁格式、主體時態(tài)、中心人稱和內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，避免填表式或履歷表式表達(dá)。通過分析可知是說明文，主體時態(tài)為一般時，內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)包括：1.活動的目的和內(nèi)容；2.活動的意義。

第二步：擬定提綱，創(chuàng)造良好的開端；敘述得體，布局謀篇；巧妙過渡，完美結(jié)尾。

第三步：遣詞造句，套用句型，上下要用銜接，表達(dá)要地道，行文要成篇。

亮點(diǎn)分析：本文中使用了It’s high time that…的虛擬語氣句型如：it’s high time that we took some measures to protect the environment.省略關(guān)系詞的定語從句，如There are many things（that） we can do to protect the environment。由before引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句如：We can reclean smoke and waste water before they go into the air or the rivers，復(fù)雜句如：We can recycle some useful garbage before they are thrown away and put the harmful in a safe place。由or引導(dǎo)的并列句如What’s more, we have every reason to make full use of natural resources, or we will be in great damage very soon.。由only+狀語置于句引導(dǎo)的部分倒裝句型：Only when everyone becomes fully conscious how important it is to protect the earth and takes effective measures to safeguard it, can we gain sustainable development with a bright future to greet.。在文章還運(yùn)用了動詞不定式作主語和表語如：To save the environment is to save ourselves.。

在文中使用連詞，如What’s more，讓文章過渡自然流暢。一些高級詞匯如As far as I am concerned, become a wide concern for becomes fully conscious，make full use of natural resources,，takes effective measures to safeguard，gain sustainable development with a bright future to greet.，高級詞匯的運(yùn)用讓文更加的有完美。

總之，本文既有復(fù)雜句又有簡單句，即有定語從句，又有狀語從句和名詞從句，又有倒裝句的運(yùn)用，同時還運(yùn)用了非謂語，連詞及高級詞匯的運(yùn)用�？芍^句式多變，上下銜接，遣詞造句。地道而有層次，不愧為一篇好文章。