Question

【題目】假如你是李華，你計(jì)劃暑假與父母去紐約進(jìn)行為期兩周的旅游。請(qǐng)你給你在紐約的筆友Tom寫一封電子郵件，請(qǐng)求他幫助你解決以下問(wèn)題：

1.推薦一家旅館（周邊環(huán)境；設(shè)施）；

2.推薦旅游線路；

3.詢間是否可以接機(jī)。

注意：

1.詞數(shù)100左右（郵件的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）；

2.可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

提示詞：地鐵subway

Dear Tom,

I will take a two-week trip to New York with my parents in the summer holiday.

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I'm looking forward to your early reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Tom,

I will take a two-week trip to New York with my parents in the summer holiday.I'm writing to ask you to do me a favor.

We'd like you to recommend us a hotel near the subway in order to get around New York more easily.And the hotel with a private kitchen is better because we want to cook meals by ourselves.I addition,please recommend a reasonable tour route so that we can save a lot of time.I know you have been to many places of interest in New York.More importantly,I wonder whether you can pick us up at the airport because we aren't familiar with New York.We'd appreciate it very much if you could help us.

I'm looking forward to your early reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】這是一篇提綱類作文，文章要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出，在寫這篇文章時(shí)要注意以下幾點(diǎn)：

1.整篇文章時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主。

2.要點(diǎn)要齊全，但是不要進(jìn)行簡(jiǎn)單的羅列，可以采用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，或者是表遞進(jìn)關(guān)系的副詞如More importantly使上下文銜接自然，行文自然流暢。

3.注意語(yǔ)氣，此文是寫請(qǐng)求信的英語(yǔ)短文，所以語(yǔ)氣上應(yīng)該比較誠(chéng)懇，不應(yīng)該出現(xiàn)過(guò)多的強(qiáng)硬語(yǔ)氣的詞語(yǔ)。

4.此作文要分四個(gè)部分寫，每個(gè)部分要更完整，最好用簡(jiǎn)單句與復(fù)合句結(jié)合的方法寫作如I wonder whether you can pick us up at the airport because we aren't familiar with New York.

5.多采用一些高級(jí)句型，如We'd appreciate it very much if you could help us.

同時(shí)使用一些詞組如write to,in order to,so that,a lot of,pick up,be familiar with,look forward to等。

【范文亮點(diǎn)】

提綱性文章難點(diǎn)：提綱性文章難點(diǎn)：擴(kuò)充成句，因?yàn)樘峋V性文章主題內(nèi)容已經(jīng)基本列出，在將短句擴(kuò)充時(shí)，要精煉。其中要注意盡量用高級(jí)詞匯和復(fù)雜句是來(lái)表達(dá)，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，定語(yǔ)從句等，就如文中“ More importantly,I wonder whether you can pick us up at the airport because we aren't familiar with New York.”使用的是定語(yǔ)從句。再者就是要多使用一些高級(jí)詞匯與詞組，如文中write to,in order to,so that,a lot of,pick up,be familiar with,look forward to等。最后就是要段落清新，層次分明。就像文中要多使用一些連接詞語(yǔ)使銜接自然。