Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是光明中學(xué)的高中生李華。你校擬選拔一些優(yōu)秀學(xué)生，利用暑期到星光希望小學(xué)為學(xué)生輔導(dǎo)英語(yǔ)。你希望參加此活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，用英語(yǔ)給校評(píng)選組寫(xiě)一封申請(qǐng)信：

對(duì)此活動(dòng)的認(rèn)識(shí)（如對(duì)本人、學(xué)校及社會(huì)的益處等）

個(gè)人優(yōu)勢(shì)（如性格、獨(dú)立生活能力、語(yǔ)言能力等）

你的計(jì)劃（如怎樣進(jìn)行輔導(dǎo)等）

注意：1.詞數(shù)80詞;

2.可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，以使內(nèi)容充實(shí)、行文連貫;

3.信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)。

參考詞匯： 星光希望小學(xué)Xing Guang Hope School

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Li Hua from Class One, Senior One .__________________________________________

______________________________________________________________________________

Yours Sincerely

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sir or Madam,

I’m Li Hua from Class One, Senior One. I’m writing to apply for the opportunity to help the students inXingGuang Hope School with their English. Thus, they can improve their English during the summer vacation. Meanwhile, I can learn how to get along with the students and benefit the whole school.

I’m kind, easy-going and always ready to help others. I wash clothes and make beds by myself to develop independence. English is my favorite subject and I’ve won several prizes in English contests. So I think that I’m qualified for the position.

I plan to communicate with the students first to know what they need. Besides, I’ll try to get them more interested in English by telling stories, singing songs, playing games and so on.

I’d appreciate it if you could give me the opportunity.

【解析】本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文，要求根據(jù)提示寫(xiě)一封申請(qǐng)信。文章應(yīng)包括對(duì)活動(dòng)的認(rèn)識(shí)，個(gè)人優(yōu)勢(shì)以及計(jì)劃等要點(diǎn)，本文內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，語(yǔ)篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇范文結(jié)構(gòu)合理，涵蓋了所有要點(diǎn)。第一段寫(xiě)了對(duì)此次活動(dòng)的認(rèn)識(shí)，第二段是作者本身的優(yōu)勢(shì)，第三段是對(duì)活動(dòng)的計(jì)劃。作者在范文中使用了較多的高級(jí)詞匯和短語(yǔ)，比如get along with, benefit, independence, communicate with等；另外作文中還使用了很多連貫詞，比如thus, meanwhile等。這使文章更加連貫順暢。