Question

12．假如你是李華，你校外教Peter合約到期，你向他推薦可帶回國的有中國特色的小物件，請給他寫一封電子郵件．內(nèi)容包括：
1．推薦兩個(gè)物件并描述其特征；
2．陳述推薦理由．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．格式已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Peter，
                  ．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，給外教Peter寫一封電子郵件．向他推薦可帶回國的有中國特色的小物件．
寫作時(shí)人稱以第一和第三人稱為主，時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主．
寫作要點(diǎn)：1．推薦兩個(gè)物件并描述其特征； 2．陳述推薦理由．
重要短語：go back to（回到…），be typical of（典型的），take sth with sb（隨身攜帶…），come into one's mind （映入腦海），be made of（由…制成），be designed into diverse shapes （被設(shè)計(jì)成不同形狀），adorable images （可愛的圖畫），a popular form of entertainment（一種受歡迎的娛樂形式），recall the unforgettable experience（回憶難忘的經(jīng)歷）．
【高分句型一】
1．Hearing that you're going back to your country，I think it's a good idea to choose some items typical of Chinese culture to take with you．
此處是由現(xiàn)在分詞+賓語從句"Hearing that"作時(shí)間狀語，主句為"I think it's a good idea to choose some items typical of Chinese culture to take with you"，主句的主語為"I"與所給動(dòng)詞"hear"構(gòu)成邏輯上的主動(dòng)關(guān)系．
【高分句型二】
2．The first item coming into my mind is the Chinese kite，the cultural symbol of my hometown．
此處為 現(xiàn)在分詞短語"coming into my mind"作名詞"item"的后置定語，可以理解為"The first item which comes into mind is the Chinese kite，the cultural symbol of my hometown"．
【高分句型三】
3．Kites，mostly made of paper，are often designed into diverse shapes，some with adorable animal images like butterflies or eagles．
此處是由過去分詞短語"made of paper"作名詞"Kites"的后置定語，可以理解為"Kites which are made of paper，are often designed into diverse shapes，some with adorable animal images like butterflies or eagles"．
【高分句型四】
4．People can fly kites in an open area，which is a popular form of entertainment．
此處是由關(guān)系代詞"which"引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句，關(guān)系代詞"which"在從句中作主語，指代前面整個(gè)主句的內(nèi)容．

解答 Dear Peter，
Hearing that you're going back to your country，I think it's a good idea to choose some items typical of Chinese culture to take with you．【高分句型一】
The first item coming into my mind is the Chinese kite，the cultural symbol of my hometown．【高分句型二】（推薦第一個(gè)物件） Kites，mostly made of paper，are often designed into diverse shapes，some with adorable animal images like butterflies or eagles．【高分句型三】（第一個(gè)物件特征） People can fly kites in an open area，which is a popular form of entertainment．【高分句型四】（推薦第一個(gè)物件理由） Besides，a pen container with the Chinese ink painting on it is also a nice choice．（推薦第二個(gè)物件及特征） I'm sure each time you use it，you will recall the unforgettable experience in China．（推薦第二個(gè)物件理由）
I hope my advice can be helpful to you．Looking forward to your good news．
Yours，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評 提綱作文在寫作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)．寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需注意積累短語和重要句型．