Question

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，結(jié)合生活中的一個(gè)事例，圍繞optimism用英語(yǔ)寫一篇短文。
Optimism is the faith that leads to achievement. Nothing can be done without hope and confidence. ( Helen Keller)
注意：
1、無(wú)須寫標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)；
2、除詩(shī)歌之外，文體不限；
3、內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合生活中的一個(gè)事例；
4、文中不得透露個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
5、詞數(shù)為120左右。

Answer 1

Optimism is important in all aspects of our life. If you can change your mind from pessimism, you can change your life.
Up to the beginning of Senior Grade Two, I did poorly in my English but I didn’t give in because I was always encouraged by both the people around me and myself. I kept practicing speaking, listening, reading and writing. When I was fed up with reading or writing, I usually entertained myself by reading some interesting English stories, jokes and humors or seeing English films. When I had some trouble in reciting or memorizing, I tried to amuse myself by playing word games or singing English songs. By this means, I always made myself cheerful and optimistic, full of splendid and colorful dreams of future. I kept practicing. Gradually, I made progress in my English. .
Thanks to the optimism, I have become one of the top students in my class by now.

試題分析：本文寫作屬于提出主題，然后對(duì)主題進(jìn)行發(fā)揮題型。這類題型給學(xué)生騰出了很寬的寫作空間。對(duì)于本文的寫作，首先說明樂觀的重要性，然后結(jié)合自己生活中的事例，比如自己在學(xué)英語(yǔ)過程中自己是如何通過積極的做法來保持樂觀的，再說明這種做法給我的學(xué)習(xí)帶了很大的好處，最終我得以成功或提高。最后進(jìn)行一句話的總結(jié)，這樣文章就比較完美了。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：對(duì)于高三的寫作，寫的過程中注意避免使用中式英文，要對(duì)所寫的句子變換表達(dá)，對(duì)于表達(dá)內(nèi)容層次時(shí)需要使用平時(shí)積累的層次關(guān)系的短語(yǔ)，多使用被動(dòng)，倒裝、虛擬來提升作文的美度。在平時(shí)寫作時(shí)應(yīng)該多進(jìn)行閱讀，對(duì)閱讀過程中寫的好的表達(dá)要進(jìn)行積累，并且學(xué)以致用，勤積累，多背誦，這樣才能作文才能穩(wěn)步的提升。