Question

【題目】閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。

Three boys and three girls were going to the beach. When they boarded the bus, they were carrying sandwiches and wine, dreaming of golden beaches. Suddenly, they noticed Vingo. He sat in front of them, eyes fixed upon a photo, completely in silence.

Deep into the night, the bus pulled into Howard Johnson’s, a service area, and everybody got off except Vingo. The young people began to wonder about him. When they came back, one of the girls sat beside him and introduced herself. “Want some wine?” she said. He smiled and took a swig from the bottle. He thanked her and became silent again.

The next morning, they awoke outside another Howard Johnson’s, and this time Vingo went in. The girl insisted that he join them. He ordered black coffee and some cookies. When they returned, the girl sat with Vingo again. After a while, slowly and painfully, he began his story. He had been in prison for the past four years, and now he was going home.

“Are you married?”

“I don’t know.”

“You don’t know?” she said.

“Well, when I was in prison I wrote to my wife,” he said, “I told her that I was going to be away for a long time, and that if she couldn’t stand it, if the kids kept asking questions, and if it hurt her too much, she could just forget me. I’d understand. ‘Get a new guy.’ I said. She’s a wonderful woman. I told her she didn’t have to write me. And she didn’t. Not for three and a half years.”

“And you’re going home now, not knowing?”

“Yeah. Well, last week, when I was sure the parole (假釋) was coming through, I wrote her again. We used to live in Brunswick, and there’s a big oak (橡樹) tree just as you come into town. I told her that if she didn’t have a new man and if she’d take me back, she should put a yellow handkerchief on the tree, and I’d get off and come home．If she didn’t want me, forget it — no handkerchief and I’d go on through.”

“Wow,” the girl exclaimed, “wow.”

She told the others, and soon all of them were in it.

注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2．至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；

3．續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；

4．續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。

Paragraph 1：

Looking at the photo, the young people found a young woman and three children in it.

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Paragraph 2：

Vingo sat there amazed, staring at the oak tree.

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Answer 1

【答案】Paragraph 1：

Looking at the photo, the young people found a young woman and three children in it. “What a lovely woman and cute kids!” “Yeah, she is a smart woman who can always make our small house warm and comfortable.” Vingo murmured. With Brunswick approaching, Vingo stopped staring at the photo,tightening his face, as if protecting himself against another disappointment. The young people took over window seats, waiting for the coming of the oak tree. Then Brunswick was ten miles, and then five. All the people opened their eyes wide, waiting for a miracle. Suddenly, they all jumped up from their seats, screaming except Vingo.

Paragraph 2：

Vingo sat there amazed, staring at the oak tree. It was covered with yellow handkerchiefs, twenty or thirty of them, maybe hundreds, flying in the wind. The oak tree stood like a banner of welcome, blowing in the wind. All the young people were up out of their seats, shouting, crying, doing small dances or shaking fists in triumph. As the young people remained thrilled, Vingo slowly rose from his seat, holding himself tightly, and made his way to the front of the bus to go home.

【解析】

這是一篇記敘文。文章講述了三個男孩和三個女孩在去度假的車上遇到了充滿心事的Vingo。當(dāng)他們偶然得知Vingo在監(jiān)獄帶了四年，現(xiàn)在正在回家的路上，但是他不知道家人是不是會再接受他時，他們和Vingo一起期待掛有黃手絹的橡樹。續(xù)寫的兩段的首句已經(jīng)給出，同學(xué)們按照首句內(nèi)容，再結(jié)合自己的想象，將內(nèi)容展開即可。

第1步：分析每個段落的寫作內(nèi)容。

由第二段中的The young people began to wonder about him(這些年輕人對他展開想象)可知，The young people指代這群年輕人，由續(xù)寫第一段首句Looking at the photo, the young people found a young woman and three children in it.(看著照片，這群年輕人看到一個女人和三個孩子)可知，第一段內(nèi)容圍繞這群年輕人的反應(yīng)進行論述。

由續(xù)寫第二段首句Vingo sat there amazed, staring at the oak tree.(Vingo大為吃驚地坐在那里，盯著橡樹看)可知，這一段圍繞橡樹與Vingo的反應(yīng)描寫。并且amazed與上文中的protecting himself against another disappointment(保護自己免受另一次失望)呼應(yīng)，說明Vingo的家人歡迎他回家。

第2步：確定關(guān)鍵詞（組），提煉寫作要點。如：make our small house warm and comfortable (讓我們的小家溫暖舒服)，stopped staring at…(停止看……)，protecting himself against…(保護自己)，take over(占領(lǐng))，opened their eyes wide(睜大他們的眼睛)，be covered with(覆蓋滿……), make one’s way to(前往某處)等。

第3步：對寫作要點遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。

第4步： 連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。