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16．2010年以來(lái)，我國(guó)相繼發(fā)生了幾起校園暴力事件，使國(guó)人為之震驚，震驚之余，大家都陷入了沉思：我們?cè)撊绾渭訌?qiáng)校園安全呢？請(qǐng)你以How to improve school safety為題，寫一篇120詞左右的短文．
參考詞匯：校園campus 保安security guard．

Answer 1

分析 本文考查開放性作文的寫作要求考生，就我國(guó)相繼發(fā)生的幾起校園暴力事件，反思我們?cè)撊绾渭訌?qiáng)校園安全呢？沒有什么要點(diǎn)給出，考生可以選擇自己了解的事例進(jìn)行描述，合理組織語(yǔ)言，也可以合理的想象，運(yùn)用自己能夠掌握的語(yǔ)言技能合理的寫作．開放性作文的難度較大，要求考生自己根據(jù)文章內(nèi)容梳理要點(diǎn)，然后在整理成文，在寫作時(shí)要合理運(yùn)用連接詞和高級(jí)詞匯高級(jí)句型，讓文章更有層次．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：
Greaat efforts should be made by the school to make sure the campus is safe．（高分句型一）make sure 確保  make efforts 作出努力
Besides，the school security guards should walk around the campus from time to time so that some bad people can be frightened away．（高分句型二）from time to time 不時(shí)地；besides，另外
As for us students，we should keep safety in mind whatever we do．（高分句型三）as for 至于，關(guān)于；keep…in mind 牢記

解答 How to improve the school safety
     School safety is a matter of great importance．Greaat efforts should be made by the school to make sure the campus is safe．（高分句型一）（點(diǎn)明本文主題）Firstly，nobody should be allowed to enter the school without permission．The school guard should check everyone entering the school strictly．Besides，the school security guards should walk around the campus from time to time so that some bad people can be frightened away．（高分句型二）More importantly，school safety education should be offered by the school．Students can be taught what to do when faced with danger．（提出應(yīng)對(duì)措施）
     As for us students，we should keep safety in mind whatever we do．（高分句型三）We shouldn't trust strangers or give away our personal information to them．（發(fā)出呼吁）

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