Question

根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)，寫一篇介紹美國(guó)殘疾女作家海倫·凱勒（Helen Keller）的短文。
參考詞匯：the deaf-mute 聾啞人
要點(diǎn)：
生于美國(guó)
19個(gè)月  因病喪失視力、聽(tīng)力以及語(yǔ)言能力
7歲     遇上女教師Miss Sullivan, 在其幫助下學(xué)會(huì)了讀、寫、說(shuō)
24歲    以優(yōu)異成績(jī)畢業(yè)于Radcliffe College
著作     The Story of My life, Let Us have Faith
貢獻(xiàn)    傾畢生精力為全世界的盲人和聾啞人服務(wù)
字?jǐn)?shù)：120左右

Answer 1

Born in 1880, Helen Keller is a well-known American woman writer with disabilities. When she was 19 months old, it was unexpected that Helen Keller was robbed by illness of sight and hearing, which caused her to become mute. Fortunately, at the age of 7, Helen met Miss Sullivan, who was very kind-hearted and helpful.
Miss Sullivan managed to help Helen learn to read, write and talk. With the help of Miss Sullivan, Helen went to study at Radcliffe College and graduated from it with honours at the age of 24. During her whole life, Helen wrote sme excellent books, such as The Story of My life and Let Us Have Faith. Besides, she devoted all her lifetime to working for the blind and the deaf-mute both at home and abroad.
All in all, Helen’s example has encouraged a lot of people whether they are normal or disabled.

試題分析：考查提綱類作文寫作。提綱類作文寫作的關(guān)鍵在于要點(diǎn)要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。同時(shí)注意謀篇布局的順序，運(yùn)用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時(shí)選擇高級(jí)的詞匯和語(yǔ)法項(xiàng)目讓文章更有文采。審題時(shí)注意時(shí)態(tài)的選擇，描述要盡量選擇簡(jiǎn)潔的語(yǔ)言，難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯和固定短語(yǔ)準(zhǔn)確表述。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇文章用了詞組managed to do; With the help of ;at the age of; devote to; All in all還用了句型Born in 1880, Helen Keller is a well-known American woman writer with disabilities. 這句話用了過(guò)去分詞做狀語(yǔ)，When she was 19 months old, it was unexpected that Helen Keller was robbed by illness of sight and hearing, which caused her to become mute.這句話用了it做了主語(yǔ)和非限制性定語(yǔ)從句 Fortunately, at the age of 7, Helen met Miss Sullivan, who was very kind-hearted and helpful. 這句話用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句 All in all, Helen’s example has encouraged a lot of people whether they are normal or disabled.這句話用了讓步狀語(yǔ)從句。
這篇文章還用了關(guān)聯(lián)詞Besides使文章更連貫。