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7．假定你是校園網(wǎng)站"交流"欄目的版主Tom，你校高二年級(jí)的同學(xué)Jack發(fā)來(lái)電子郵件，敘述因新學(xué)期分班離開原班級(jí)最好的朋友John，他擔(dān)心距離會(huì)使友誼消失．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示發(fā)一封郵件 （150詞左右） 給Jack，提出合理化建議．
1．Jack 的看法不完全正確；
2．應(yīng)珍惜友誼，和朋友John約時(shí)間談一談自己的感受，并希望能夠保持友誼．對(duì)方會(huì)因此而感動(dòng)，也會(huì)珍惜友誼；
3．如果時(shí)間允許的話，相約課余或周末見面交流．
Hi，Jack，
I have already read your e-mail．
                                                        
Good luck!
Yours
Tom．

Answer 1

分析 題目要求以校園網(wǎng)站"交流"欄目版主Tom的身份，給同學(xué)Jack回一封電子郵件，并就Jack擔(dān)心的問題給他提一些建議．寫作的要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)列出，寫作時(shí)，注意行文的流暢和連貫．注意人稱、時(shí)態(tài)、標(biāo)點(diǎn)和語(yǔ)法知識(shí)的正確使用．多使用定語(yǔ)從句、名詞性從句等，以增加作文的亮點(diǎn)．【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文使用了較多的賓語(yǔ)從句，如：what you are worrying about is not a big problem，explain that you feel…，and that you don't want this to happen；范文還使用了主語(yǔ)從句what you are worrying about；方式狀語(yǔ)從句as if the two of you are growing apart；時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句When students move between classes；另外，范文也使用了一些固定搭配，如seem to do sth，take their place，make an effort to，try doing，take some action等．范文不但用上了所給要點(diǎn)，也使用了一些復(fù)合句，顯示出深厚的語(yǔ)法功底．

解答 Hi，Jack，
I have already read your e-mail．
I think what you are worrying about is not a big problem．When students move between classes old friendships often suffer as new ones seem to take their place．But it isn't always the case．If you truly value the friendship you should be able to make an effort to promote it．There is nothing to stop you spending time with your friend John．（高分句型） You can find him during the breaks between lessons or at some other time and explain that you feel as if the two of you are growing apart and that you don't want this to happen．（高分句型） He will most probably be very touched by this and try to keep the relationship with you．If he feels the same way you can arrange more time together after class or at weekends．The worst thing is just to worry about something but do nothing to make it right．（高分句型） Try taking some action!Good luck!
Yours
Tom．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡(jiǎn)單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認(rèn)真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點(diǎn)．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達(dá)的要點(diǎn)．設(shè)計(jì)好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時(shí)態(tài)、人稱等，把要點(diǎn)串聯(lián)起來(lái)，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認(rèn)真檢查，避免錯(cuò)誤．仔細(xì)閱讀全文，查找是否有錯(cuò)，注意時(shí)態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．