Question

7．One day，while she was walking in the woods，a girl found two starving songbirds．She took them home and put them in a small cage．She cared them with love and the birds grew strong．Every morning they greeted her with a wonderful song．The girl felt great love for the birds．
One day the girl left the door to the cage open．The larger and stronger of the two birds flew from the cage．The girl was so frightened that he would fly away．As he flew close，she grasped him wildly．Her heart felt glad at her success in capturing him．Suddenly she felt the bird go limp．She opened her hand and stared in horror at the dead bird．Her desperate love had killed him．
She noticed the other bird moving back and forth on the edge of the cage．She could feel his great need for freedom．He needed to soar into the clear，blue sky．She lifted him from the cage and tossed him softly into the air．The bird circled once，twice，three times．
The girl watched delightedly at the bird's enjoyment．Her heart was no longer concerned with her loss．She wanted the bird to be happy．Suddenly the bird flew closer and landed softly on her shoulder．It sang the sweetest melody that she had ever heard．
She finally realized that the fastest way to lose love is to hold on it too tight，the best way to keep love is to give it WINGS!
[寫作內(nèi)容]
1．以約30個(gè)詞概括短文的要點(diǎn)；
2．然后以約120個(gè)詞就"愛就要放手"這一主題發(fā)表看法，并包括如下要點(diǎn)：
a） 以自己為例，簡述生活中你父母對(duì)你的過度關(guān)注；
b） 你父母的做法對(duì)你造成了什么不良的影響；
c） 如果有機(jī)會(huì)，你會(huì)就此問題對(duì)父母說些什么
[寫作要求]
1．作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子．
2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱．
[評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)]
概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語篇連貫．

Answer 1

分析 本文是讀寫任務(wù)型寫作，這類作文可按照三段式模板寫：第一段：概況所給短文要點(diǎn)．第二段：過渡詞引出主題句---闡述理由．第三段：個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)．特別要注意第一段的概括．用自己的語言概括，不能照搬照抄原文．
時(shí)態(tài)一般用一般過去時(shí)或一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱一般以第三人稱為主．
重要短語：the best way to do…．（做某事最好的方法），try to do sth （努力做某事），allow sb to do（允許某人做某事），chat with （對(duì)…..聊天），suffer a lot from （遭受…..），due to（由于），make one's own decisions（自己做決定），tolerate sth（忍受某事），let go（放手）．
【高分句型】
1．A girl realized the best way to keep love is to let a bird fly ①when she accidentally killed a bird  ②which tried to escape and freed the other which flew happily．
①這里是由when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句，‘A girl realized the best way to keep love is to let a bird fly'為主句．
②這里是由which引導(dǎo)的定語從句，先行詞為a bird，which在定語從句中作主語．
2．If I had the chance to talk with them about this，I would like to tell them that I can manage without their hovering over me!
這里是虛擬語氣在if條件狀語從句中的用法，是對(duì)現(xiàn)在情況的虛擬，if從句中的謂語動(dòng)詞形式為"were/動(dòng)詞的過去式"，主句的謂語動(dòng)詞形式為"would/could/might/should+v"．

解答 A girl realized the best way to keep love is to let abird fly when she accidentally killed a bird which tried to escape and freedthe other which flew happily．【高分句型】（概括）
I must admit that my parents love me very much，but their excessive love sometimes hasgone too far．Forexample，they won'tallow me to chat with my American friend online or allow me to go shopping bymyself for fear I might be cheated though I am already 18 years old．What's worse，they even secretly read my diary．（舉例簡述生活中父母對(duì)自己的過度關(guān)注）
To be honest，I am now suffering a lot from this．Due to their excessive love，I don't have many friends．As a girl of 18，I am not able to make my own decisionsabout many things．Though I can't tolerate all this，I dare not speak up for I know this isall due to their deep love for me．（父母的做法對(duì)自己的不良影響）
 If I had the chance to talk with them about this，I would like to tell them that I canmanage without their hovering over me!【高分句型】I'd liketo say to them，"Pleaselet go of your anxiety．Give me some advice just when necessary，and for most of the time，let me think for myself．Your love should never be a burden on me．Love me，and let me fly with it．"（想對(duì)父母所說的話）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 讀寫任務(wù)型寫作是將閱讀與寫作有機(jī)結(jié)合，要求考生既能讀懂文章信息，又要依據(jù)要求規(guī)范連貫地表達(dá)內(nèi)容，其中準(zhǔn)確概括很有挑戰(zhàn)且十分重要，根據(jù)記敘文、議論文、說明文等不同文體作相應(yīng)概括，總的來說，遵循以下步驟：確定主題句；尋找關(guān)鍵詞；重構(gòu)主題句；重組支持句．寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需注意積累短語和重要句型．