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4．假設你是李華，暑假期間，從福州坐火車去北京旅游．請根據(jù)下列要求和你的想象，寫一篇郵件，與你的美國朋友Peter分享你的這次經(jīng)歷．
要求：1．網(wǎng)上購票；
2．沿途經(jīng)歷．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100詞左右；
2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Peter，
I had an excellent train ride during the summer vacation by high-speed rail．I had bought my train ticket online ahead of time．It is convenient to buy train tickets now．Before I got on the train，I picked up my ticket from the machine with my identity card．（高分句型一）
Sitting on the train，I felt comfortable and relaxed．（高分句型二）I enjoyed the scenery outside the window．With train running fast，the landscapes changed quickly．There is a dining car in the train but the meals are very expensive．So I only ate my own food．I had a good time in Beijing，visiting many famous attractions．（高分句型三）
Looking forward to your holiday experience．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假設你是李華，暑假期間，從福州坐火車去北京旅游．請根據(jù)下列要求和你的想象，寫一篇郵件，與你的美國朋友Peter分享你的這次經(jīng)歷，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：網(wǎng)上購票；沿途經(jīng)歷．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：ahead of time提前；pick up撿起，去��；have a good time過得愉快；Look forward to盼望；get on登車
Before I got on the train，I picked up my ticket from the machine with my identity card．（高分句型一）
 Sitting on the train，I felt comfortable and relaxed．（高分句型二）
So I only ate my own food．I had a good time in Beijing，visiting many famous attractions．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Peter，
       I had an excellent train ride during the summer vacation by high-speed rail．I had bought my train ticket online ahead of time．It is convenient to buy train tickets now．Before I got on the train，I picked up my ticket from the machine with my identity card．（高分句型一）
       Sitting on the train，I felt comfortable and relaxed．（高分句型二）I enjoyed the scenery outside the window．With train running fast，the landscapes changed quickly．There is a dining car in the train but the meals are very expensive．So I only ate my own food．I had a good time in Beijing，visiting many famous attractions．（高分句型三）
        Looking forward to your holiday experience．
                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                     Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．