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5．一家英語(yǔ)報(bào)社向中學(xué)生征文，主題是"My dream school"，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)及暢想寫一篇作文．
1 學(xué)校上學(xué)，放學(xué)時(shí)間及開設(shè)的課程．
2 學(xué)生的校內(nèi)外活動(dòng)．
3 學(xué)校的環(huán)境及師生關(guān)系．
注意：①詞數(shù)120左右  ②可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息"My dream school"為主題，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確三個(gè)要點(diǎn)：學(xué)校上學(xué)，放學(xué)時(shí)間及開設(shè)的課程，學(xué)生的校內(nèi)外活動(dòng)，學(xué)校的環(huán)境及師生關(guān)系．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)．a(chǎn)fter-school activities課外活動(dòng)；play sports 做運(yùn)動(dòng)；kind and helpful和藹樂于助人
They are not only our teachers but also our friends．（高分句型）

解答 My Dream School
My dream school starts at 8：30 a．m．a(chǎn)nd ends at 3：30 p．m．（高分句型）There are three lessons in the morning and two in the afternoon．We don't need to do so much homework．Therefore，we have more time for after-school activities．For example，we can do reading for one and a half hours and play sports for one hour every day．
My dream school looks like a big garden．There are all kinds of flowers and trees around the classroom buildings．We can lie on the grass for a rest，or sit by the lake listening to music．The teachers here are kind and helpful．They are not only our teachers but also our friends．（高分句型）
How I wish I could receive education at such a school!

點(diǎn)評(píng) 提綱類寫作的文章較開放式的文體，比較好寫．學(xué)生在寫作的過程中，首先思路要清晰，要對(duì)所表達(dá)的句子通順的說出來，遇到不會(huì)的要學(xué)會(huì)替換所用語(yǔ)，來達(dá)到同樣的意思．在每一篇作文中，對(duì)于表達(dá)觀點(diǎn)的句子，都要用上起承轉(zhuǎn)合的連詞來加強(qiáng)文章的層次感，適當(dāng)運(yùn)用俗語(yǔ)，運(yùn)用平時(shí)常用的句式來使文章富有變化，表達(dá)地道得體．