Question

【題目】假如你是李華。你參加了學校剛剛組織的英語口語大賽，并獲得了一等獎，在座的評委 Ms.Monica 對你的表現(xiàn)進行了點評并給予了充分肯定，同時鼓勵你繼續(xù)努力�，F(xiàn)在你想給她寫封 email。

要求：1.詞數(shù)100左右。2. 開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)為你寫好，不計人總詞數(shù)。3. 可以適當增加細節(jié)，使內(nèi)容更加連貫。

Dear Monica,

I am Li Hua.

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We are looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Monica,

I am Li Hua. Thanks for your encouraging comments on my performance at the English Oral Contest. I am so proud to have got the first prize in it. But I have some more problems in English study and I would like you to give me some further advice.

I have been frustrated with English composition. My English teacher always says that I should first make an outline before writing. But I have always been wondering how to do that, so I would appreciate it if you could offer me some valuable suggestions.

By the way, the Chinese New Year is coming. My parents and I feel like inviting you to our home to enjoy this festival. We would be so happy if you could accept this invitation.

We are looking forward to your reply.

【解析】試題分析：本篇書面表達要求寫一封電子郵件。內(nèi)容包括：假如你是李華。你參加了學校剛剛組織的英語口語大賽，并獲得了一等獎，在座的評委 Ms.Monica 對你的表現(xiàn)進行了點評并給予了充分肯定，同時鼓勵你繼續(xù)努力。要點較多，在寫作時注意不要遺漏要點，同時還需要對要點進行細節(jié)上的補充，以使文章內(nèi)容豐富，上下銜接。其次，注意時態(tài)選擇上要使用一般現(xiàn)在時。最后，文章要注意語言簡練、用詞準確。

【亮點說明】本篇范文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，要點全面。文中運用了大量的短語，比如comment on；be proud to；be frustrated with；by the way；feel like等。還運用了一些高級句法，如But I have always been wondering how to do that, so I would appreciate it if you could offer me some valuable suggestions.這句話運用了賓語從句。最后，文章注意了語句的銜接，如but；and；so；if等連接詞起到很好的連接上下文的作用，使文章讀起來自然流暢，朗朗上口。