Question

進入初三后，你的朋友Larry變化很大，昨天班會課老師表揚了他。你為他感到高興，一高興你就想寫點什么，于是就寫了一篇關于他變化的文章以之鼓勵。

Larry	過去	現(xiàn)在
個性	內向，朋友少，偶感孤獨	外向，友好，朋友多
作業(yè)	沒有完成，抄別人的	在朋友的幫助下，能完成
行規(guī)	上課吃東西，聽音樂,這是不允許的	遵守班規(guī),上課認真，進步大，老師喜歡
理想	籃球運動員，父母反對，打球妨礙學習	英語好，想當英語教師，
…	…	…

提示：used to do sth (used to be…)   feel lonely          copy others’ homework 
obey the class rules  with the help of     make progress  be allowed to do… 
注意：1．所寫內容必須包括表格中的信息
2．表格中的… 必須你自己拓展。
3．詞數(shù)：100個左右。要求意思連貫，語句通順
4．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的人名與校名
 My friend Larry has changed a lot.                                                                
                                                                             
                                                                             
                                                                                   
                                                                             
                                                                            
                                                                            

Answer 1

My friend Larry has changed a lot. He used to be introverted. He had few friends so he used to feel lonely sometimes. And his study was also poor. He couldn’t finish his homework by himself, so he copied others. In class he didn’t obey the class rules. For example, he used to listen to music in class, which was not allowed. He wanted to be a basketball player, but his parents were against of it because they thought it might impair learning.
Fortunately, all these have changed. Now he is more outgoing and friendly. He has more friends too. With the help of friends he can finish the homework by himself now. To the teachers’ surprise, he makes great progress in study because of his hard working. Besides, he is good at English now so he wants to be a English teacher in the future.
I am so proud of the great changes that he has made. I hope he can make greater progress from now.

試題分析：這是一篇材料作文。材料中已經(jīng)給出了具體的信息，寫作時要把這些要點用正確的句子表達清楚，注意句子之間的邏輯關系，適當?shù)氖褂眠B詞。由于材料中涉及到過去和現(xiàn)在兩種情況，所以表述時尤其注意時態(tài)和動詞的變化。
【亮點分析】
這篇作文緊扣材料，內容充實，表達清晰流暢。文中使用了很多連詞，加強了句子的邏輯關系，例如and， so， for example， but， because，等等。文中也有些復雜的長句，如：For example, he used to listen to music in class, which was not allowed.例如，他過去常在課堂上聽音樂，這是不允許的。Which引導了一個非限制性定語從句。To the teachers’ surprise, he makes great progress in study because of his hard working.令老師驚喜的是，由于他的努力學習，他取得了很大進步。To one’s surprise令某人驚訝的是， make progress取得進步；because of因為。