Question

以My ideal school為題，寫一篇英語短文，詞數(shù)在80左右。要點(diǎn)如下：
1. 8點(diǎn)半上課，這樣我可以多睡一會。下午3點(diǎn)半放學(xué)，我可以有更多的時(shí)間做課外活動。
2.教室寬敞明亮，老師和藹善良，同學(xué)友好互助。
3.每天只有半個(gè)小時(shí)的作業(yè)，可以有足夠的時(shí)間留給我的業(yè)余愛好。
4．每周有3節(jié)體育課，籃球是我最喜歡的運(yùn)動。
5.學(xué)校一邊有個(gè)公園，另一邊有個(gè)大超市，周末可以去公園玩，去超市購物。
6.學(xué)校每個(gè)月進(jìn)行一次去大城市的旅行。
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Answer 1

One possible version:
My ideal school starts at 8:30a.m.So I can sleep more. Classes are over at 3:30p.m. I have more time to do after—school activities. The classrooms are big and bright. The teachers are very kind to us. The students are friendly and helpful to each other. We only have half an hour of homework every day. We can have enough time for our hobbies. We have three PE lessons and my favourite sport is playing basketball. There is a park on one side of our school and a big shopping mall on the other. We can go to play in the park and go shopping at weekends. Every month we go on a school trip to a big city.

試題分析：本文是篇材料作文，材料非常簡單，學(xué)生很容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的�？忌�在寫作之前必須認(rèn)真審題，首先要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，要求自己理想的學(xué)校。應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。人稱用第一人稱或?qū)W生們。注意認(rèn)真閱讀材料，分析英語的正確表達(dá)和句子之間的銜接。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】 本文做到了包含所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，語句通順，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號運(yùn)用正確。還運(yùn)用了have more time to do ; go shopping；動詞的-ing形式做表語等等。并注意了句子開頭的變化和的銜接如： so等等。