Question

7．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下信息，用英文寫一篇介紹阿里巴巴集團(tuán)（Alibaba Group）創(chuàng)始人兼主席馬云的介紹短文．
寫作內(nèi)容

基本信息	1964年9月10日出生于浙江杭州；2014年被認(rèn)定為中國(guó)首富
求學(xué)時(shí)期	喜愛英語(yǔ)
	每天早晨騎車45分鐘去附近一家賓館找老外聊天
	免費(fèi)帶老外參觀杭州城
	高考兩次落榜
	1984年考上杭州師范學(xué)院（Teacher's Institute），現(xiàn)名杭州師范大學(xué)（Normal University）
	獲得英語(yǔ)專業(yè)學(xué)士學(xué)位（a bachelor's degree）
1999年起	帶領(lǐng)18人的團(tuán)隊(duì)創(chuàng)辦阿里巴巴
	阿里巴巴成為電子商務(wù)（e-commerce）的巨頭
	阿里巴巴對(duì)人們的生活以及中國(guó)的經(jīng)濟(jì)產(chǎn)生了重大的影響

寫作要求
只能用5個(gè)句子表達(dá)全部?jī)?nèi)容．
評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)
句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫．
Born on September 10，1963，in Hangzhou，Zhejiang Province，Ma Yun is the founder andChairman of Alibaba Group and was recognized as the richest person in China in 2014．
At an early age，Ma developed a desire to learnEnglish so he rode his bike for 45 minutes each morning in order to go to anearby hotel and chat with foreigners there．He would guide them around thecity for free in order to practice and perfect his English．Later in his youth，although he failed the college entrance exam twice，he attended HangzhouTeacher's Institute，currently known as Hangzhou Normal University，and graduatedin 1988 with a bachelor's degree in English．
In 1999，heestablished Alibaba Group with the help of a team of 18 people，which hasdeveloped into an e-commerce giant and exerted increasing influence on people'slives as well as China'seconomy．．

Answer 1

分析 本文采用了"表格+提綱類"形式，根據(jù)文章所給提示信息寫一篇短文，介紹阿里巴巴集團(tuán)（Alibaba Group）創(chuàng)始人兼主席馬云的相關(guān)情況．既是提綱作文又是圖表類作文．
時(shí)態(tài)以一般過去時(shí)為主．人稱以第三人稱為主．
重要短語(yǔ)：berecognized as（被認(rèn)可為），develop a desire to do sth （養(yǎng)成做某事的愿望），chat with （聊天），for free （免費(fèi)），be known as （作為…而著名），with the help of （在…的幫助之下），establishsth （建立…），develop into sth （發(fā)展成…）．
【高分句型】
1．Born on September 10，1963，in Hangzhou，Zhejiang Province，Ma Yun is the founder and Chairman of Alibaba Group and was recognized as the richest person in China in 2014．
這里是過去分詞born構(gòu)成的短語(yǔ)作時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)，主句為Ma Yun is the founder and Chairman of Alibaba Group and was recognized as the richest person in China in 2014．主句的主語(yǔ)與動(dòng)詞bear構(gòu)成邏輯上的被動(dòng)關(guān)系．
2．he established Alibaba Group with the help of a team of 18 people，which has developed into an e-commerce giant and exerted increasing influence on people's lives as well as China's economy．
這里是由which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，which在從句中作主語(yǔ)，指代前面主句的內(nèi)容．

解答 Born on September 10，1963，in Hangzhou，ZhejiangProvince，Ma Yun is the founder and Chairman of Alibaba Group and was recognizedas the richest person in China in 2014．【高分句型】（基本信息）  
At an early age，Ma developed a desire to learnEnglish so he rode his bike for 45 minutes each morning in order to go to anearby hotel and chat with foreigners there．He would guide them around thecity for free in order to practice and perfect his English．Later in his youth，although he failed the college entrance exam twice，he attended HangzhouTeacher's Institute，currently known as Hangzhou Normal University，and graduatedin 1988 with a bachelor's degree in English．（求學(xué)時(shí)期）
 In 1999，heestablished Alibaba Group with the help of a team of 18 people，which hasdeveloped into an e-commerce giant and exerted increasing influence on people'slives as well as China'seconomy．【高分句型】（1999年起）

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