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【題目】今年一月，孝感遭遇極寒天氣，暴雪肆虐，持續(xù)時間較長，讓我們感受到了大自然的威力。為了大家的安全，部分老師和同學(xué)主動在校園、走廊等處鏟冰、掃雪、鋪防滑墊等，為大家做好安全服務(wù)。假定你是李華，請你給Xiaogan Daily的編輯寫一封信，要點如下：

1. 描述志愿者們助人為樂的事跡；

2. 表達你對這些志愿者的感激和欣賞；

3. 呼吁大家向他們學(xué)習(xí)，積極參與有利他人的活動。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

3. 書信的開頭和結(jié)尾已寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。

參考詞匯： 走廊corridor; 鏟冰shovel ice; 防滑墊 non-slip mat

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Best wishes.

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Editor,

I am Li Hua, a high school student. I am writing to express my thanks and admiration for my teachers’ and schoolmates’ actions of goodwill, and appeal to more people to learn from them.

In January , the weather was freezing cold and a snowstorm swept our city. The thick snow and the icy ground made it hard for us to get around. To ensure our safety, some of my teachers and schoolmates offered to shovel ice, sweep snow and lay non-slip mats along the corridors. Even though they were tired out, they were happy to be able to give a hand to people around.

Their kindness has received a lot of praise and recognition. They do set a good example to us . I think we should learn from them and volunteer to do something beneficial to others.

Best wishes!

Yours ,

Li Hua

【解析】試題分析：

本文書面表達屬于應(yīng)用文，要求寫一封書信。

第1步：根據(jù)提示可知，本篇是一封書信：今年一月，孝感遭遇極寒天氣，暴雪肆虐，持續(xù)時間較長，讓我們感受到了大自然的威力。為了大家的安全，部分老師和同學(xué)主動在校園、走廊等處鏟冰、掃雪、鋪防滑墊等，為大家做好安全服務(wù)。假定你是李華，請你給Xiaogan Daily的編輯寫一封信，要點如下：描述志愿者們助人為樂的事跡；表達你對這些志愿者的感激和欣賞； 呼吁大家向他們學(xué)習(xí)，積極參與有利他人的活動。

第2步：根據(jù)寫作要求確定關(guān)鍵詞，如：express my thanks and admiration表達我的感謝和贊美；freezing cold極冷；To ensure our safety,為了確保我們的安全；non-slip mats防滑墊；give a hand to幫忙做某事；received a lot of praise and recognition受到許多贊美和認可；等。

第3步：根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)語態(tài)問題。

第4步：連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。

本文內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，魚片連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。另外全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。

【亮點說明】

本文是一篇書信，格式正確，內(nèi)容齊全，結(jié)構(gòu)布局合理，文中使用高級句子。I am Li Hua, a high school student.句中使用同位語；The thick snow and the icy ground made it hard for us to get around.此句中it做形式賓語，動詞不定式的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)做真正的賓語；To ensure our safety, some of my teachers and schoolmates offered to shovel ice, sweep snow and lay non-slip mats along the corridors.動詞不定式做目的狀語；Even though they were tired out, they were happy to be able to give a hand to people around.句中使用讓步狀語從句；They do set a good example to us .強調(diào)謂語運用得當(dāng)。