Question

目前，我國中學(xué)生的健康水平嚴(yán)重下降，引起了父母、學(xué)校和專家的憂慮。為解決這一問題，有人提出將體育納入高考。結(jié)合實(shí)際，談?wù)勀愕目捶ǎ?br /> 1．是否贊成體育納入高考及原因；
2．簡述健康與學(xué)習(xí)的關(guān)系；
3．你認(rèn)為學(xué)校應(yīng)該做什么來提高學(xué)生身體素質(zhì)。
注意：
1．詞數(shù)120左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．文中不得透露個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
4．文章開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Chinese students' health has been getting worse these years, and some people believe putting PE into the College Entrance Examination might be a way out.
In my opinion，____________________________________________________________

Answer 1

One possible version:
Chinese students’ health has been getting worse these years, and some people believe putting PE into the College Entrance Examination might be a way out.
In my opinion, it is essential to put PE into the College Entrance Examination because it can not only provide our students with a stronger body but also develop the strength of our spirits. In other words, I can’t agree more. As we know, more and more pressure of study we have to face now so that a strong body is of vital importance to help us shoulder the pressure. Moreover, if we got ill, more time will be taken for us to recover and our study progress will be influenced.
As far as I’m concerned, schools have the responsibility to require students to exercise one hour ever day at least. Meanwhile ,schools are supposed to hold more outdoor activities in order to make sure that each student  is in good health.
In a word, more and more attention should be paid to students’ health

試題解析：從文章體裁分析，本文是一篇記敘文的寫作，針對我國中學(xué)生的健康水平嚴(yán)重下降，引起了父母、學(xué)校和專家的憂慮。為解決這一問題，有人提出將體育納入高考。結(jié)合實(shí)際，談?wù)勀愕目捶ǎ喊�括以下幾個(gè)方面：1．是否贊成體育納入高考及原因； 2．簡述健康與學(xué)習(xí)的關(guān)系； 3．你認(rèn)為學(xué)校應(yīng)該做什么來提高學(xué)生身體素質(zhì)。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】
文章使用了非常好的短語和句子給文章增色，如it is essential to put PE into the College Entrance Examination用到了高級詞匯essential必要的，固定句型：It is + adj + to do sth,it 做形式主語，代to do sth; because it can not only provide our students with a stronger body but also develop the strength of our spirits（not only…but also…（不但 而且）As we know, more and more pressure of study we have to face now so that a strong body is of vital importance to help us shoulder the pressure.，（As引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句，so that 引導(dǎo)目的狀語從句），I can’t agree mor（我再同意不過了）并且主語了句子的銜接如：In my opinion在我看來, In other words,換句話說 Moreover而且，加之， As far as I’m concerned據(jù)我看來，Meanwhile在此期間，同時(shí)等。