Question

13．假如你叫李華，你的朋友Jenny來(lái)信向你詢問(wèn)如何保持健康．請(qǐng)你給他發(fā)一封E-mail提些建議．內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：
1．注意合理飲食，多吃水果蔬菜；
2．保證充足睡眠，至少8小時(shí)；
3．堅(jiān)持鍛煉身體，多參加體育運(yùn)動(dòng)．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可適當(dāng)增添細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．郵件的開(kāi)頭結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Jenny，
How nice to hear from you!In your letter you asked me how to keep healthy．I would like to give you some advice．
…．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱類作文，我們需要用正確的英語(yǔ)把給出的要點(diǎn)表達(dá)出來(lái)．本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)比較具體，故需要準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次．特別注意在選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】How nice to hear from you!感嘆句位于句子開(kāi)頭；In your letter you asked me how to keep healthy．疑問(wèn)詞加動(dòng)詞不定式運(yùn)用巧妙；Since we grow very fast，we are in  need of nutritious food，such as fresh vegetables，fruits，fish，meat and so on．Since引導(dǎo)原因狀語(yǔ)從句，在此表示一種客觀事實(shí)；I think you'd better not eat food with much sugar and fat．賓語(yǔ)從句出現(xiàn)在句中；And you should get plenty of sleep，which is necessary for you to have at least eight hours of sleep every day．非限制性定語(yǔ)從句和動(dòng)詞不定式完美結(jié)合；Only in this way can you keep fit．部分倒裝把文章推向了高潮；另外，However，In addition，的點(diǎn)綴，為文章增色添彩．

解答 Dear Jenny，
     How nice to hear from you!In your letter you asked me how to keep healthy．I would like to give you some advice．
     As we know，food is of great important to us teenagers．Since we grow very fast，we are in  need of nutritious food，such as fresh vegetables，fruits，fish，meat and so on．（高分句型一） However，I think you'd better not eat food with much sugar and fat．And you should get plenty of sleep，which is necessary for you to have at least eight hours of sleep every day．（高分句型二） In addition，you should take physical exercise regularly．It will be beneficial to your health．Only in this way can you keep fit．（高分句型三）
      Best wishes!
                                                                                                                                                                                                                             Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                              Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文屬于提綱類作文，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題．平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫(xiě)作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果