Question

假如你叫李華，你的同學(xué)王明總是說(shuō)因?yàn)閷W(xué)習(xí)忙而沒(méi)有時(shí)間鍛煉，最近天氣變化快，他生病了，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)給他寫封建議信：

1．冬去春來(lái)，萬(wàn)物復(fù)蘇，細(xì)菌也繁殖旺盛，抵抗力差的人容易生病。

2．鍛煉能增強(qiáng)體質(zhì)，并能使頭腦清醒；鍛煉一兩個(gè)小時(shí)，學(xué)習(xí)效果會(huì)更好；

有了強(qiáng)健的體格，學(xué)習(xí)時(shí)就不容易感到疲勞，也不易被疾病侵襲；

3．鍛煉跟學(xué)習(xí)同樣重要，要堅(jiān)持每天鍛煉一小時(shí)。

注意：（1）短文須包括上述要點(diǎn)，應(yīng)適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

（2）詞數(shù)：100左右。短文開頭已給出（不計(jì)詞數(shù)）。

Dear Wang Ming,

I am sorry to hear that you have been ill for days and hope you are better now.

 

 

 

 

Best wishes !

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Wang Ming,

I am sorry to hear that you have been ill for days and hope you are better now.

As is known to us all, spring is the best season of growing. It is such a refreshing time that we are filled with the hope and promise. Yet it is also the best time for the bacterium, so we should take care and exercise more especially when we are busy and hard-working, which means more outdoor activities. You are always saying that you have studied so hard that you had no time for exercise. This is harmful to your health. I feel it would be more beneficial to your health if you could take more exercise in future.

Exercise can improve your physical health and refresh your mind. After one or two hours of exercise you can study better. Only when you have a strong body can you keep on studying without feeling tired. Otherwise your study will be interrupted from time to time by sickness.

Exercise is as useful and important as your study. I hope you can take at least one hour’s exercise every day after you are recovered .

Best wishes !

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

 

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。要求根據(jù)要點(diǎn)寫封建議信，做題前一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義。這篇作文的要點(diǎn)是以提綱列出的，而且很詳細(xì)，考生要做的是將要點(diǎn)全面的合理的解釋清楚，應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡(jiǎn)單句而造成的單調(diào)感。多使用高級(jí)詞匯和重點(diǎn)句型。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文使用了一些高級(jí)的短語(yǔ)和各種多變的句式：be filled with 充滿了，be harmful to對(duì)…有害， from time to time 時(shí)而，As is known to us all, spring is the best season of growing. 這句話使用了as引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，It is such a refreshing time that we are filled with the hope and promise. 這句話使用了it做形式主語(yǔ)，Yet it is also the best time for the bacterium, so we should take care and exercise more especially when we are busy and hard-working, which means more outdoor activities.這句話使用了when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句， You are always saying that you have studied so hard that you had no time for exercise. 這句話使用了賓語(yǔ)從句和so…that…句型， I feel it would be more beneficial to your health if you could take more exercise in future.這句話使用了if引導(dǎo)的狀語(yǔ)從句， Only when you have a strong body can you keep on studying without feeling tired. 這句話使用了倒裝句。

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