Question

假設(shè)你是中學(xué)生劉麗，你的媽媽對你的學(xué)習(xí)成績要求很苛刻：每次考試必須進入班內(nèi)前三名；你為此感到很有壓力。請根據(jù)以下提示用英語給媽媽寫一篇書信：
表明自己的想法；
陳述自己的理由；
表達自己的愿望。
注意：1. 詞數(shù)：120-150；
2. 可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)， 以使內(nèi)容充實、行文連貫；
3. 信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
Dear Mum,
I feel it really necessary to have a talk with you and I do hope this letter can help us better understand each other. ____________________________________________________________
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Yours sincerely,
Liu Li

Answer 1

Dear Mum,
I feel it really necessary to have a talk with you and I do hope this letter can help us better understand each other.
Mum, I understand your true love for me, but I have to say your opinion about my study is not quite right.
Firstly, I think high grades are important, but a student can’t be judged only by this standard. A student should develop in every respect, including wisdom, health and life attitude. In addition, hard work is not always a guarantee of top places in class. Good marks depend on many factors, such as diligence, intelligence and good luck. Last but not least, you have put so much pressure on me that every time I take an exam, I always feel nervous and anxious…
So, dear Mum, please don’t be so strict with me in my study any longer. Please let me live like a lovely girl; let me make more friends; and most importantly, let me grow up normally, healthily and happily.
I love you, Mum!
Yours sincerely,
Liu Li

試題分析：考查應(yīng)用文中的書信的寫作。你的媽媽對你的學(xué)習(xí)成績要求很苛刻：每次考試必須進入班內(nèi)前三名；你為此感到很有壓力。請根據(jù)以下提示用英語給媽媽寫一篇書信。要點都已經(jīng)給出，信件要點包括：表明自己的想法；陳述自己的理由；表達自己的愿望。審題時注意本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時，描述要盡量選擇簡潔的語言，運用合適的語法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運用高級詞匯和固定短語準(zhǔn)確表述。象范文的you have put so much pressure on me that every time I take an exam,使用了every time這樣的連詞結(jié)構(gòu)，還要用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞被句子連接起來，象In addition, Last but not least等詞，這樣文章顯得更連貫。
點評：書信類短文的關(guān)鍵在于要點要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。同時注意謀篇布局的順序，運用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時選擇高級的詞匯和語法項目讓文章更有文采。