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4．每年三月是植樹活動(dòng)月，假定你是李華，你們班開展了一次植樹活動(dòng)，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)，寫一篇日記，記敘這次植樹活動(dòng)．
1）活動(dòng)目的：親近自然，綠化環(huán)境
2）活動(dòng)時(shí)間：2017年3月12日
3）活動(dòng)地點(diǎn)：西山（距你校5公里）
4）具體活動(dòng)過程
5）活動(dòng)感受
注意：1．運(yùn)用日記的正確形式
2．字?jǐn)?shù)100 左右
3．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文流暢．
March 12，2017 Sunny
Today our class held a tree planting activity which aims to get close to the nature and beautify the environment．（高分句型一）In the morning，we took a bus to Western hill which is 5 kilometers away from our school．On arrival，we began to work immediately．Some were digging holes．Some were carrying and planting young trees．Others were watering them．After getting the work done，we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees．（高分句型二）Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action．
Seeing the lines of trees，we all had a sense of achievement．（高分句型三）We feel it's our duty to protect our environment．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息每年三月是植樹活動(dòng)月，假定你是李華，你們班開展了一次植樹活動(dòng)，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)，寫一篇日記，記敘這次植樹活動(dòng)，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：1）活動(dòng)目的：親近自然，綠化環(huán)境；2）活動(dòng)時(shí)間：2017年3月12日；3）活動(dòng)地點(diǎn)：西山（距你校5公里）；4）具體活動(dòng)過程；5）活動(dòng)感受2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：aim to目的是；get close to靠近，接近；put up 豎起，張貼；a sense of achievement成就感；
Today our class held a tree planting activity which aims to get close to the nature and beautify the environment．（高分句型一）
Others were watering them．After getting the work done，we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees．（高分句型二）
Seeing the lines of trees，we all had a sense of achievement．（高分句型三）

解答 March 12，2017                                                 Sunny
      Today our class held a tree planting activity which aims to get close to the nature and beautify the environment．（高分句型一）In the morning，we took a bus to Western hill which is 5 kilometers away from our school．On arrival，we began to work immediately．Some were digging holes．Some were carrying and planting young trees．Others were watering them．After getting the work done，we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees．（高分句型二）Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action．
      Seeing the lines of trees，we all had a sense of achievement．（高分句型三）We feel it's our duty to protect our environment．

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