Question

6．假定你是李華．你的筆友Jane最近因?yàn)閷W(xué)業(yè)繁重，身體感到不適，嚴(yán)重影響了學(xué)習(xí)．因此，她發(fā)e-mail給你，尋求你的幫助．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)提示予以回復(fù)．
　　　寫作要點(diǎn)：
　　　1．合理的飲食；2．適度的鍛煉；3．充足的睡眠．4．…
　　　注意：
　　　1．短文詞數(shù)不少于120；
　　　2．開頭和結(jié)尾部分已寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
　　　3．可根據(jù)情況增減細(xì)節(jié)，詳略得當(dāng)；
Dear Jane，
　　　I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling ill these days．In your letter you asked me how to stay healthy and keep attentive in class．
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Best wishes．
 Yours sincerely
　　                                                                                              Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 寫好這類作文要注意幾個(gè)步驟：1． 認(rèn)真審題，找準(zhǔn)提示語(yǔ)中的關(guān)鍵詞或句，確定中心思想．2． 依據(jù)關(guān)鍵句，草擬提綱，梳理文章的脈絡(luò)3． 準(zhǔn)確定位人稱、時(shí)態(tài)．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次．4．最后還要認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無(wú)拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等
高分句型一：
Second，taking morning exercise every day is a nice choice
二，每天早晨鍛煉是一個(gè)很好的選擇．
高分句型二：
You can do some sports，such as running，walking，or playing ball games to refresh yourself if weather permits．
你可以做一些運(yùn)動(dòng)，如跑步，散步，或玩球刷新自己如果天氣允許的話．

解答 Dear Jane，
I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling ill these days．In your letter you asked me how to stay healthy and keep attentive in class．Here is my advice．
First，have three meals a day and never neglect your breakfast．Keep a balanced diet．For example，eat nutritious food like fresh vegetables，fruits，eggs and fish．Second，taking morning exercise every day is a nice choice（高分句型一）．As we all know，everyday exercise helps build a strong body．You can do some sports，such as running，walking，or playing ball games to refresh yourself if weather permits（高分句型二）．But，remember not to exercise outdoors in a smoggy day．Finally，don't stay up too late to make sure you have a good sleep every night．
If you do accordingly，I believe you'll feel well soon and you can listen to your teacher energetically and attentively．
Best wishes．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

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