Question

13．Directions：Write an English composition according to the instructions given below．
請以老師當眾表揚你為話題，用所給的句子為開頭，續(xù)寫一篇英語短文，內(nèi)容包括：
 1．老師因何事表揚你；   2．你受表揚時的心情；   3．此次經(jīng)歷給你帶來的變化．

As a student，I can tell you that there is nothing better than being praised by my teacher before my classmates．The other day，…

注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù) 100個左右．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，以老師當眾表揚你為話題，寫一篇英語短文．寫作要點包括：1．老師因何事表揚你； 2．你受表揚時的心情； 3．此次經(jīng)歷給你帶來的變化．寫作時人稱以第一和第三人稱為主，時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主．
重要詞匯：nothing better than （最好的莫過于…）；recite（背誦）；even though （即使）； set a good example to （為…樹立一個好的榜樣）；only if（只要…）；make great progress（取得大的進步）；be determined to do（下決心做某事）；make a great difference（有很大差別）
高分句型：1．He said I memorized all the words ①even though I was not good at English，②adding that I set a good example to all of my classmates．
                 ①even though 引導一個讓步狀語從句；②現(xiàn)在分詞短語在句中作狀語．
                 2．I came to realize①only if we put our heart into our lessons ②could we make great progress．
                  ①only if we put our heart into our lessons could we make great progress是一個賓語從句，作動詞realize的賓語．
                  ②在從句中only if位于句首，句子用倒裝，所以情態(tài)動詞could提前．

解答 As a student，I can tell you that there is nothing better than being praised by my teacher before my classmates．
    The other day，I was praised by my head teacher because I  recited all the words of Unit 3．He said I memorized all the words even though I was not good at English，adding that I set a good example to all of my classmates（高分句型一）．Hearing what he said，I was more than glad with my heart beating wildly．I came to realize only if we put our heart into our lessons could we make great progress（高分句型二）．Meanwhile，I am determined to study harder rather than waste precious time on playing video games or chatting online．
From my own experience，I learn that a few words of praise can make a great difference．

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意要點的提煉要全，關鍵短語和句型要寫對，準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，還要注意人稱和時態(tài)使用要正確．盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次．