Question

【題目】The 6yearold kid watched in silence as the man behind the desk，the headmaster of the school，shook his head more than once to his mother．

Minutes later，mother and son walked slowly out of the school，her right hand holding his little hand，her left holding an umbrella to shield(遮擋) both of them from the sun．“Where are we going now，mother？”asked the kid，looking up at her．“To another school，”was her gentle reply．For some reason，the little kid had not been accepted by the school，and she was taking him to another，to try to get him registered．That was more than 50 years ago．That woman was my mother；that little kid was me．

Fifty years later，the day after my mother had slipped into a coma(昏迷) from a stroke，I sat next to her，holding her hand，stroking it，watching her body heaved up and down as she breathed heavily，as if she was struggling with something．Her eyes were closed，her mouth opened．I whispered softly to her，“Mum，it’s okay．You have given us everything．You can let go now．No need to struggle anymore，Mum．”

A few days later，Mum died．At her bedside，I spent some time just looking at my mother，soaking in the finality of her death．There she was，my mother，motionless and lifeless．I took hold of her still warm but lifeless hand，holding it for the last time，recalling every piece of the precious moment we spent together．

I finally let go of her hand—lifeless，yet having given so much life to so many of us，and placed it next to her body．I found myself saying silently to her the only words that came to my mind，“Goodbye Mum，thank you for everything．”

Thank you，Mother，fornot giving up，so that I could go to school．Thank you for coaching me，for reading to me，for ironing my school uniforms，for combing my hair，for tying my shoe laces，for making sure I had a little handkerchief inside my pocket．．．

Rest in peace，Mother，you are still very much alive in us．Happy Mother’s Day．

寫作內(nèi)容

1．以約30詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容。

2．以約120詞對(duì)“母親對(duì)你的愛(ài)或者她對(duì)你成長(zhǎng)的影響”進(jìn)行議論，內(nèi)容包括：

(1)描述你的母親；

(2)簡(jiǎn)述她對(duì)你的影響；

(3)你準(zhǔn)備怎樣表達(dá)對(duì)她的感激之情。

寫作要求

1．作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)

概括準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語(yǔ)篇連貫。

Answer 1

【答案】

The writer expresses his gratitude for his mother’s dedication and endless effort in raising him．In his memory，it is her hand that leads him through various moments in his life．

Like the author，I also appreciate my mother for everything she devotes to bringing me up．My mother is a kind and gentle woman，a math teacher at a middle school．She takes good care of me and offers me the best thing she can afford．

My mother not only sets me a good example in life，but also in work．She often says，“Work while you work，and play while you play．That is the way to be happy．” What a piece of good advice！I will always bear it in mind．

As far as I am concerned，nothing can be compared to Mother’s love to me，and my gratitude to her is beyond words．The only thing I am able to do at present is to work hard and make greater progress in my study，so that I can be her pride one day．

【解析】

試題分析：本文首先以“我”與母親之間以及母親對(duì)我的影響的一個(gè)故事來(lái)引出本文寫作的主題，寫作內(nèi)容 ：1．以約30詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容。2．以約120詞對(duì)“母親對(duì)你的愛(ài)或者她對(duì)你成長(zhǎng)的影響”進(jìn)行議論，內(nèi)容包括：(1)描述你的母親；(2)簡(jiǎn)述她對(duì)你的影響；(3)你準(zhǔn)備怎樣表達(dá)對(duì)她的感激之情。寫作要求：1．作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱，這是特別值得我們注意的。評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：概括準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語(yǔ)篇連貫。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文內(nèi)容充實(shí)，把題目的要求都寫進(jìn)去了，條理清晰，首先用一兩句話對(duì)上文的故事進(jìn)行簡(jiǎn)單的描述，接下來(lái)描述了作者的母親已經(jīng)母親對(duì)我的影響，，最后表達(dá)對(duì)母親的感激之情。本文一些短語(yǔ)的使用，如In one’s memory/ devote to/ bring up/ set sb a good example/ bear in mind/ As far as I am concerned/ make progress等，給文章增添了不少光彩，充分體現(xiàn)了作者扎實(shí)的英語(yǔ)基本功，很好的顯示了他平時(shí)良好的閱讀習(xí)慣；同時(shí)一些句子的使用，如：強(qiáng)調(diào)句it is…that…句型：it is her hand that leads him through various…/not only…but also…句型：My mother not only sets me a good example in life，but also in …/還有句子The only thing I am able to do at present is to … 等，給閱卷老師眼前一亮的感覺(jué)，而且也是他們?yōu)槟慵臃值闹匾獦?biāo)準(zhǔn)，充分體現(xiàn)了本文的文采。