Question

9．假如你是李華，美籍教師Susan 來你班任教一個多月了，她希望同學(xué)們對她的教學(xué)提出意見和建議．請你以下要點，用英文給她寫一封建議信．內(nèi)容包括：
1．講課語速再慢點；
2．將西方文化與教學(xué)相結(jié)合；
3組織課外活動；
4 其他建議．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右．
2．適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．（開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．）
Dear Susan，
My classmates really appreciate your excellent teaching，butbut we think that you can make some improvement in some aspects．I am writing to offer you some advice．To begin with，I hope you can slow down a little bit when giving us a lecture because some students find it hard to keep up with you．Secondly，we will have a better understanding of the text if you can combine the learning material with some western culture．Furthermore，we expect to see some classic movies in the language lab after class in order to broaden our horizons．Finally，we hope you can organize the English Corner regularly to help us speak English，by which we can improve our spoken English quickly．
I believe you will consider my suggestions．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 （高分句型一）To begin with，I hope you can slow down a little bit when giving us a lecture because some students find it hard to keep up with you．
該句使用來when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句；because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從句；還有find it adj．to do覺得做某事…
（高分句型二）we hope you can organize the English Corner regularly to help us speak English，by which we can improve our spoken English quickly．
該句使用which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語，在which之前加介詞by，意思通過活動我們能提高口語；
高級詞匯：keep up with  跟的上； have a better understanding of 對…有更好的理解；combine with和…結(jié)合；
過渡詞：To begin with首先；Secondly其次；Furthermore而且；Finally最后；

解答 Dear_Susan，
     （首先表達感激之情）My classmates really appreciate your excellent teaching，but we think that you can make some improvement in some aspects．（給出適當建議）I am writing to offer you some advice．（高分句型一）To begin with，I hope you can slow down a little bit when giving us a lecture because some students find it hard to keep up with you．Secondly，we will have a better understanding of the text if you can combine the learning material with some western culture．Furthermore，we expect to see some classic movies in the language lab after class in order to broaden our horizons．Finally，（高分句型二）we hope you can organize the English Corner regularly to help us speak English，by which we can improve our spoken English quickly．
    I trust you will consider my suggestions．
Yours sincerely
Lihua

點評 書面表達的時態(tài)使用得當，概括文章所要求的全部要點，而且能夠有效地使用語句之間的連接成分，所寫內(nèi)容連貫，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，完全達到了預(yù)期的寫作目的