Question

高三學(xué)生面臨沉重的學(xué)習(xí)壓力， 很多學(xué)生利用課間十分鐘的休息時(shí)間學(xué)習(xí)， 實(shí)際上沒有什么效果。假如你是新華中學(xué)高三年級的李立， 就此現(xiàn)象給中學(xué)生英語報(bào)寫封信，發(fā)表自己的看法。信的內(nèi)容包括以下要點(diǎn)：

1. 十分鐘的課間休息的必要性（說明理由）；

2. 你是怎樣利用這十分鐘的。

注意：1. 詞數(shù) 120-150； 2. 信的開頭已經(jīng)給出（不計(jì)入總數(shù)）。

Dear Editor,

I’m a Senior 3 student from Xinhua Middle school. _________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________________

Yours,

Li Li

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

Dear Editor,

I’m a Senior 3 student from Xinhua Middle School. As is known to all, senior 3 students are suffering heavy pressure of study. As a result, many students are trying to spare every minute to study, even during the ten-minute break between classes.

In my opinion, taking the ten-minute break between classes is definitely necessary, which makes us relaxed both physically and mentally. The ten-minute break is meant for us to relax and prepare for the next class. Only by doing so can we have more energy to study effectively in class.

My ten-minute break is always pleasing as well as relaxing. Sometimes I do some simple exercises. Sometimes I have a free chat with my classmates or just take a walk outside. Therefore, I always feel energetic and listen attentively in class.

【解析】

試題分析：

根據(jù)提示可知本文為信件類作文。信件類作文要注意格式和結(jié)束語。可以采取一般作文的三段式結(jié)構(gòu)，第一段用兩到三句話如I’m a Senior 3 student from Xinhua Middle School和many students are trying to spare every minute to study, even during the ten-minute break between classes簡單介紹自我和寫作目的。正文部分用三到四句話講述寫作背景及目的。在這一段的描述中，注意闡明清楚出題者的兩點(diǎn)要求“1. 十分鐘的課間休息的必要性（說明理由）；2. 你是怎樣利用這十分鐘的”�？梢杂胕n my opinion, as far as I can see, in my view, I think that 等等引出自己觀點(diǎn)。當(dāng)然同學(xué)們可以將這兩點(diǎn)要求分開闡述，第二點(diǎn)要求寫在第三段里。檢查全文的時(shí)候再加上適當(dāng)?shù)倪^渡詞如First，besides等使得文章上下文銜接自然，最后檢查格式。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】

本篇范文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，層次分明，段首句即為該段的中心句，如In my opinion, taking the ten-minute break between classes is definitely necessary和第三段的My ten-minute break is always pleasing as well as relaxing。其次文章中各種句型靈活使用，如第一段的as引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句As is known to all, senior 3 students are suffering heavy pressure of study。第二段中的句型變化更為巧妙，如動(dòng)名詞taking the ten-minute break between classes做主語，以及which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句which makes us relaxed both physically and mentally。還有only接狀語位于句首的部分倒裝句Only by doing so can we have more energy to study effectively in class。精彩句型非常多，就不一一列舉了。而且正文部分結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，對出題者的要求都包括在內(nèi)。最后是各種短語如as a result, be meant for sb. to do sth,等的使用，都為文章增色不少。