Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是學(xué)生會主席李華，你將在學(xué)校英文報上刊登一篇以“保護大自然”為主題的文章，文章已寫好，寫信想請外籍教師Tom幫忙修改潤色。

注意:1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear Tom,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Tom,

I’m writing to ask you for advice, hoping that you can do me a favor.

As you know, our school has held an English writing competition about protecting nature recently, which has appealed to many students to take part in it. I’m keen to write articles, so I has written an article, hoping that the article can be published in the school English newspaper. However, I don’t know how the article is and know where to polish it. Would you please help me polish the article? If you agree, I’ll come to your house at your convenience.

I’d appreciate it if you’d like to offer me a helping hand. Looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇書面表達屬于應(yīng)用文。要求考生寫一封信給外教Tom，請他幫忙修改自己有關(guān)“保護大自然”主題的文章，以便在校英文報上刊登。

第一步：審題

體裁：應(yīng)用文

時態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應(yīng)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主

結(jié)構(gòu)：總分法

總分法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。

要求：1. 求助事由；

2. 希望得到幫助；

3. 感謝幫助。

第二步:列提綱 （重點詞組）

do sb. a favor；writing competition；appeal to；publish；polish；at sb.’s convenience

第三步：連詞成句

1. I’m writing to ask you for advice, hoping that you can do me a favor.

2. As you know, our school has held an English writing competition about protecting nature recently, which has appealed to many students to take part in it.

3. so I has written an article, hoping that the article can be published in the school English newspaper.

4. I don’t know how the article is and know where to polish it.

5. I’ll come to your house at your convenience.

(根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。）

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列補充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause(從句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表換一種方式表達：In other words, that is to say,

6.表進行舉例說明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陳述事實：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表選擇：either…or…，or

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰。

第五步：潤色修改