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15．談?wù)勀銓?duì)"It is a healthy diet，regular exercise as well as a large amount of sleep that are really important．"這句話的看法．
字?jǐn)?shù)要求：100詞左右．
                                                                                  

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分析 這是一篇話題類作文，談?wù)勀銓?duì)"It is a healthy diet，regular exercise as well as a large amount of sleep that are really important．"這句話的看法．所以首先必須讀懂這句話，并且要用第一人稱來寫．寫作時(shí)不能只是生硬的寫出這句話的意思，一定要結(jié)合實(shí)際，舉例說明自己的理解．需要注意不要偏離文章中心，寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，一定要契合作文的主題，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題．盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次．同時(shí)注意題目要求100詞左右，不能寫太多，也不能寫太少，適中即可．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：
With the living conditions improving，more attention is paid to health．（高分句型一）句中使用了with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)
First，exercise not only builds up your strength but also shapes your body．（高分句型二）句中使用了not only…but also…不僅…而且…
What's more，you should develop a balanced eating habit and avoid food which contains too much fat．（高分句型三）句中使用了what's more而且；
So we should eat healthily，exercise regularly and sleep properly so that we can become healthy，wealthy and wise．（高分句型四）句中運(yùn)用了so that引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語從句

解答 With the living conditions improving，more attention is paid to health．（高分句型一）（點(diǎn)明話題）There are many effective ways to improve your health state．First，exercise not only builds up your strength but also shapes your body．（高分句型二）By working out regularly，you will feel relaxed and increase the ability to concentrate on studies．What's more，you should develop a balanced eating habit and avoid food which contains too much fat．（高分句型三） So you'd better make a careful decision about what to eat．Last but not least，a good amount of sleep is also important to your health．Being much too tired makes it easy for you to get sick．Worse still，loss of sleep can cause you to put on weight easily．（提出解決辦法）
     So we should eat healthily，exercise regularly and sleep properly so that we can become healthy，wealthy and wise．（高分句型四）（發(fā)表個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文屬于話題類作文，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題．平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果．