Question

11．假設(shè)你校英語報(bào)就"我心中的偶像（Idol in my heart）"展開征文活動，你對該話題很感興趣，擬投稿．你的短文必須包含以下內(nèi)容：
1．誰是你心中的偶像？
2．你為什么會崇拜他（她）？
3．結(jié)合一個(gè)具體事例說明偶像在你成長過程中對你的影響．

Answer 1

分析 首先，仔細(xì)審題，本文要寫的是一個(gè)人，并且是你的偶像．內(nèi)容是三方面：偶像是誰，崇拜他的原因以及具體事例說明影響．寫作時(shí)態(tài)為一般過去時(shí)，兼顧一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱以第一和第三人稱為主．因此必需將文章分成三大部分：
1．引出偶像其人
通過最高級+定語從句相結(jié)合的形式來引出自己的偶像：中文老師，句式較為復(fù)雜，開門見山且讓人眼前一亮．
2．崇拜他的理由和具體事例
正文部分的第一句要注意過渡，從偶像其人過渡到崇拜原因，使用了一個(gè)表語從句來承上啟下，流暢自然，引出下面三點(diǎn)理由．在分析理由的過程中，使用first of all，second，finally等自然連接，同時(shí)靈活使用with結(jié)構(gòu)、定語從句、分詞作狀語等，是內(nèi)容與形式融為一體．
3．總結(jié)全文
最后用一個(gè)分詞結(jié)構(gòu)和一個(gè)虛擬語氣的倒裝句來結(jié)束全文，簡潔自然．
重要短語：
set example for sb為某人樹立榜樣；long for渴望，盼望；with great eagerness熱切地；arouse one's interest in doing sth引起某人做某事的興趣；gaine much in college在大學(xué)期間收獲如此之多
高分句型：
1．Perhaps the most vital idol in my life is my Chinese teacher Martin who has set many examples for me during my studying time．本句中含有一個(gè)who引導(dǎo)的定語從句，修飾先行詞teacher．
2．Not only did he lead us to an appreciation of the beauty and perfection of Chinese and literature，but also aroused our great interest in exploring something deeper in this field．本句中not only…but also…引導(dǎo)的兩個(gè)句子時(shí)，not only后面的句子用部分倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)．
3．I do feel so happy to have her as my teacher．本句中是屬于強(qiáng)調(diào)謂語動詞的句型，由助動詞do強(qiáng)調(diào)謂語．
4．Had it not been his wit advice and positive influence on me，I would not have gained so much in college．本句中為省略了if用倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)的虛擬條件句，是對過去事實(shí)的假設(shè)．

解答 Perhaps the most vital idol in my life is my Chinese teacher Martin who has set many examples for me during my studying time．（引出話題）（高分句型）
      What often brings back memories of my school teacher is his special qualities．First of all，I was attracted by his wit．I remember we always long for his class with great eagerness because his lecture were humorous，never failing to make us laugh loud．Second，he gave us the greatest gift a teacher can offer--an awakening of a passion for learning．Not only did he lead us to an appreciation of the beauty and perfection of Chinese and literature，but also aroused our great interest in exploring something deeper in this field．（高分句型）Finally，I was deeply impressed by the respect he showed for us，for he treated us like friends rather than students．
      Considering all the above-mentioned merits of Martin，I do feel so happy to have her as my teacher．（高分句型）Had it not been his wit advice and positive influence on me，I would not have gained so much in college．（高分句型）（闡述影響）

點(diǎn)評 總的來說，我們在寫人和事相結(jié)合的文章時(shí)，一定要認(rèn)真分析所給的信息提示，準(zhǔn)確審題，靈活運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語知識，采用不同個(gè)表達(dá)方式將要點(diǎn)表達(dá)清楚．在分析人物性格的過程中，以具體事例為例，以增強(qiáng)文章的說服力．