Question

14．假如你是李華，你的朋友Linda最近很心煩，因?yàn)楦改笇?duì)她要求很?chē)?yán)格，整天讓她學(xué)習(xí)禁止她做一些她想做的事情，比如上網(wǎng)、和朋友玩等．請(qǐng)你給她寫(xiě)封信，進(jìn)行心理疏導(dǎo)并提出一些建議．應(yīng)包括以下兩個(gè)要點(diǎn)：
1．簡(jiǎn)述自己類(lèi)似的經(jīng)歷；
2．提出至少兩條建議．
注意：詞數(shù)100個(gè)左右，開(kāi)頭與結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Linda，
I can understand how you feel．When I was young，                                      

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類(lèi)作文，根據(jù)提示信息你的朋友Linda最近很心煩，因?yàn)楦改笇?duì)她要求很?chē)?yán)格，整天讓她學(xué)習(xí)禁止她做一些她想做的事情，比如上網(wǎng)、和朋友玩等．請(qǐng)你給她寫(xiě)封信，進(jìn)行心理疏導(dǎo)并提出一些建議．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：簡(jiǎn)述自己類(lèi)似的經(jīng)歷；提出至少兩條建議． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：heart to heart心貼心地；communicate with 與…溝通；even though即使；By the way順便說(shuō)一下；is of some help有幫助的；
But after I talked to my parents heart to heart，we had a better understanding of each other．（高分句型一）
So try to communicate with your parents to let them know that you are wise enough to manage your own business well．（高分句型二）
By the way，it's understandable that your parents ask you to put your studies in the first place．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Linda，
       I can understand how you feel．When I was young，I had the same experience as you do．But after I talked to my parents heart to heart，we had a better understanding of each other．（高分句型一）So try to communicate with your parents to let them know that you are wise enough to manage your own business well．（高分句型二）To understand them better，you should always put yourself in their position．Don't you think that all parents in the world love their children even though they are sometimes strict and serious？If you can spend your time and money wisely，I am sure that your parents will trust you and you will enjoy more freedom．
       By the way，it's understandable that your parents ask you to put your studies in the first place．（高分句型三）
       I hope my advice is of some help to you．
                                                                                                                                                                                                       Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                        Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．