Question

20．火車(chē)、地鐵、公交車(chē)內(nèi)的"低頭族（phubber）"越來(lái)越多，尤其是青年人，上車(chē)后很快拿出手機(jī)，不管路程長(zhǎng)短，不論坐著還是站著，人人都眼睛盯著屏幕，有的人走路也在看手機(jī)…針對(duì)這一現(xiàn)象，發(fā)表你的看法．
注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右．
2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．

Answer 1

分析 本文是開(kāi)放性作文，根據(jù)所給提示信息，針對(duì)這一現(xiàn)象發(fā)表看法，以此為話題進(jìn)行思維和聯(lián)想，自由發(fā)揮寫(xiě)一封建議信，又屬于提綱作文．
在寫(xiě)作時(shí)以第一人稱和第二人稱為主，時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主．
重要短語(yǔ)：bring sb convenience（給某人帶來(lái)便捷），would like to do sth（想要做某事），stare at（盯著看），miss the chance（錯(cuò)過(guò)機(jī)會(huì)），surf the Internet（上網(wǎng)），cross the street（穿過(guò)街），care about（關(guān)心），as far as I am concerned（就我所關(guān)注的而言），do harm to（對(duì)…有害），hold up（舉起）．
【高分句型一】
1．However，more and more phubbers，especially young people，would like to stare at their screen，①surfing or playing games，②no matter whether they are on a bus or a train，and no matter how far the journey is．
①此處是由兩個(gè)現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)"surfing or playing games"作伴隨狀語(yǔ)，主句為"young people，would like to stare at their screen"，主句的主語(yǔ)"young people"．
②此處是由"no matter+疑問(wèn)詞"引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句．
【高分句型二】
2．And even they will not miss the chance to surf the in internet when crossing the street．
  此處是時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句中的省略"連詞when+現(xiàn)在分詞"，可以理解為"when they cross the street"．
3．They never care about what happened around．
  此處是由疑問(wèn)代詞"what"引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句．
【高分句型四】
4．As far as I am concerned，phubbing on a moving bus does harm to their eyes．
此處是由動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)"phubbing on a moving bus"作主語(yǔ)，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞為"does harm to"，賓語(yǔ)為"their eyes"，動(dòng)名詞作主語(yǔ)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞用單數(shù)．

解答 The mobile phone has been part of our life．Mobile phones bring us much convenience．However，more and more phubbers，especially young people，would like to stare at their screen，surfing or playing games，no matter whether they are on a bus or a train，and no matter how far the journey is．【高分句型一】And even they will not miss the chance to surf the in internet when crossing the street．【高分句型二】They never care about what happened around．【高分句型三】（結(jié)合自身實(shí)際提出應(yīng)采取的積極態(tài)度和應(yīng)對(duì)方法） 
 As far as I am concerned，phubbing on a moving bus does harm to their eyes．【高分句型四】Besides，phubbing is also dangerous while crossing the street．Wish phubbers hold up their heads to enjoy surroundings．（看法）

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