Question

請閱讀下面短文,并按照要求用英語寫一篇150詞左右的文章。

Cleanliness is important to academic success at one Chinese university where compulsory labor is part of a program designed to award class credits while teaching students with proper moral values.

During winter, the sky is still dark at 6:30 a.m. when the first-year students in Trade and Management College in Zhengzhou begin sweeping the 165-acre campus and it can take up to an hour.

Mr. Sun, the university official, said labor is good for building character and promotes “the spirit of hard work.” Some students also claim that they are always proud of the clean campus. They never litter because they’ve been through the labor and understand that they should respect the fruits of labor of others.

Some students, however, are against it because they feel the demands of the cleaning program are a distraction. Some often show up late and hungry to their morning classes after rushing to sweep the campus and clean their rooms.

【寫作內容】

1. 用約30個單詞寫出上文概要；

2. 用約120個單詞發(fā)表你的觀點，內容包括：

(1) 支持或反對這個學校的做法；

用2-3個理由或論據(jù)支撐你的觀點。

【寫作要求】

1. 可以支持文中任一觀點，但必須提供理由或論據(jù)；

2. 闡述觀點或提供論據(jù)時，不能直接引用原文語句；

3. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱；

4. 不必寫標題。

【評分標準】

內容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當。

Answer 1

支持：

One university in Zhengzhou designs a program where students must clean the campus every day and relates it to class credits. Some people support the program while others do not. (30)

Generally, I am in favor of the practice. To begin with, through their effort, students provide a clean and comfortable environment, which, as a result, is an assurance of their successful academic life. Moreover, cleaning and labor can not only serve to build students’ character but also contribute positively to students developing healthy routines and good sanitation habits. Last but not least, by enjoying the fruits of others’ labor, students will develop the awareness of gratitude and regard labor as a matter of honor.

In short, carrying out the cleaning program is crucial. The significance for students of participating in it means more than academic success. It is part of moral education and benefits students as well as the campus. (120)

反對：

It is required by one university in Zhengzhou that students should clean the campus every morning to achieve class credits. Opinions on the practice vary widely from person to person. (30)

I am strongly opposed to the practice for the following reasons. First of all, cleaning tends to take up too much time, which becomes a distraction for students and discourages them from focusing on their academic performances. Then, students can be encouraged to maintain clean living areas but it’s unreasonable to relate the cleaning with the academic credits. As students, they should put more efforts into their studies to achieve class credits instead of sweeping the campus. Furthermore, though someone claims labor can contribute to developing the spirit of hard work, it should by no means be achieved through daily floor-sweeping.

In conclusion, there is no sense in students sweeping the campus, for it benefits neither their character nor study. (120)

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇立場選擇型作文寫作。動筆前，一定要認真閱讀原文，并理解內容。認真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達給了一段材料：先要求以約30個詞概括上文的主要內容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個詞寫一篇短文，按照要點去表達，不能有遺漏，寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系。寫作時盡量使用自己會的單詞、詞組和句型，同時也要注意使用一些高級語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。

支持：

第一段縮寫題文。就兩句話，點出主題背景，引出爭論話題， 30字一氣呵成。where的成功引導使得大段的文字濃縮在這一精簡的復合句中。第二段表明自己立場。Generally, I am in favor of the practice. Generally開頭，增色不少。To begin with, through their effort, students provide a clean and comfortable environment, which, as a result, is an assurance of their successful academic life.這一亮點句中，To begin with連詞使用得當，梳理論述次序，而其后長短句結合，使得句子讀起來抑揚頓挫，夾雜單詞which引導非限制性定語從句以及as a result做插入語成分，一下子使作文上升了一個檔次。Moreover，進而論述。not only…but also…的使用經(jīng)典搭配將繁雜內容一次打包。Last but not least，最后一點。develop the awareness of gratitude and regard labor as a matter of honor理由確切不牽強。第三段總結，In short. 其中significance，participating和as well as的使用可圈可點。

反對：

第一段概括上文的主要內容，It is required by…Opinions on the practice vary widely from person to person句子新穎且承上啟下。第二段表明自身立場，strongly opposed強烈反對。First of all首先，思路明確，緊接which引導的非限制性定語從句將。Then接著，進而論述。but 和instead of在承接句子間順折關系時效果不錯。As students …設定從學生角度出發(fā)，說理更合情。Furthermore，再上一層樓。it should by no means 的使用使得句式再添一彩。第三段總結，In conclusion，文末總結。使用there is no sense…語氣感強烈，而neither …nor...便水到渠成地將受益兩者都否定掉。 (120)

總結：一般考試觀點論述作文，可以把它想象為中學語文那句經(jīng)典的“龍頭、鳳尾、豬肚子”。首先第一段陳述問題，并且在第一段最后一句話或者第二段第一句話亮出自己的觀點，然后第二段給出自己的論點，并且舉出具體的例子進行支持，最后一段總結性陳詞即可，這都是很套路的。值得一提的是，在高中英語作文寫作技巧中，總結性陳詞很重要，平時也要多注意積累。