Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是高一學(xué)生李華。你的英國朋友Jim在給你的郵件中提到他對中國儒家文化很感興趣，并請你介紹有關(guān)歷史人物孔子(Confucius)。請你給Jim回信，介紹孔子，內(nèi)容包括：

1. 基本情況。

2. 主要主張：仁，義，序。

3. 重要影響。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)100左右；文中不能透露真實姓名及學(xué)校。

2. 開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

3. 可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)使行文連貫。

Dear Jim,

It’s great to hear from you. I feel proud knowing your interest in school of Ju in the ancient Chinese history.

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Yours

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Jim,

It’s great to hear from you. I feel proud knowing your interest in school of Ju in the ancient Chinese history.

As for Confucius, he is also my favorite figure in the ancient Chinese history. He was a Chinese thinker and social philosopher, who lived in the ancient China where states were often at war with each other. His teachings and philosophy have deeply influenced many Asian countries.

He stressed the importance of kindness, duty and order in society.

We Chinese are greatly influenced by his teachings. In fact, one of his sentences impressed me a lot. He said we should treat others the way we want to be treated. He inspires me to always be kind and polite，because that’s how I would like to be treated.

Interested in knowing more? I can even find you some books! Just let me know.

Yours

Li Hua

【解析】這是一篇提綱類作文，文章要點已經(jīng)給出，在寫這篇文章時要注意以下幾點：

1.整篇文章時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主。

2.要點要齊全，但是不要進行簡單的羅列，可以采用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，或者是表遞進關(guān)系的副詞如As for Confucius,使上下文銜接自然，行文自然流暢。

3.注意語氣，此文是寫介紹信的英語短文，所以語氣上應(yīng)該比較誠懇，不應(yīng)該出現(xiàn)過多的強硬語氣的詞語。

4.此作文要分四個部分寫，每個部分要更完整，最好用簡單句與復(fù)合句結(jié)合的方法寫作如He was a Chinese thinker and social philosopher, who lived in the ancient China where states were often at war with each other.

5.多采用一些高級句型，如It’s great to hear from you. He said we should treat others the way we want to be treated. He inspires me to always be kind and polite，because that’s how I would like to be treated.同時使用一些詞組如As for， each other，In fact,inspire to 等。

【范文亮點】

提綱性文章難點：提綱性文章難點：擴充成句，因為提綱性文章主題內(nèi)容已經(jīng)基本列出，在將短句擴充時，要精煉。其中要注意盡量用高級詞匯和復(fù)雜句是來表達，如強調(diào)句，定語從句等，就如文中He was a Chinese thinker and social philosopher, who lived in the ancient China where states were often at war with each other.使用的是定語從句。再者就是要多使用一些高級詞匯與詞組，如As for， each other，In fact,inspire to 等。最后就是要段落清新，層次分明。就像文中要多使用一些連接詞語使銜接自然。