Question

【題目】假如你是班長(zhǎng)李華，你們班的外教 Smith 最近生病住院了,請(qǐng)代表你們班的同學(xué)給他寫封慰問(wèn)信，內(nèi)容包括:

1. 表示難過(guò)； 2. 感謝他的付出； 3. 希望給他一些幫助。

注意：1. 詞數(shù):100左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear Smith,

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Yours，

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Smith,

We’re sorry to hear you’re ill and have been in hospital for several days. We miss you a lot. You’re a great teacher -- humorous and warmhearted. In your class, you always motivate us to interact with you. And you’re willing to spare your time to communicate with us in English, which has greatly improved our oral English. We appreciate what you’ve done for us and have regarded you as our friend.

Now we’d like to do something for you, like bringing you food and borrowing books for you. We really hope you can recover soon. If there’s anything that we can do for you, please let us know.

Best wishes.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇書面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文。要求考生作為班長(zhǎng)代表全班同學(xué)給生病住院的外教Smith老師寫封慰問(wèn)信。

第一步：審題。

體裁：書信應(yīng)用文

時(shí)態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主。

要點(diǎn)：1 對(duì)Smith老師生病住院表示難過(guò)

2 感謝老師為我們英語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)的付出

3 希望能為老師做一些對(duì)他有幫助的事情

結(jié)構(gòu)布局：

第一段，對(duì)Smith老師生病住院表示難過(guò)。

第二段，感謝老師對(duì)我們的付出：

1 為了調(diào)動(dòng)我們學(xué)習(xí)英語(yǔ)的興趣，上課方式幽默生動(dòng)

2 課后會(huì)像朋友一樣和我們溝通交流，給我們提學(xué)習(xí)意見

第三段， 表達(dá)想要做一些對(duì)他有幫助的事情的想法，并祝早日康復(fù)。

第二步：列重點(diǎn)詞語(yǔ)，詞組（注意好詞的使用）

如：be sorry to hear that, on behalf of, more than, be grateful to, in order to, take an interest in, humorous, vivid, make a comment on，recovery等

第三步：連詞成句（注意好句型的使用如主從復(fù)合句，非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞，注意拼寫和時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題）

如：1 We are sorry to hear that you have been in hospital for several days.

2 On behalf of all students in the class, I want to say we all miss you more than a word can express.

第四步：連句成篇（注意銜接詞的使用）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second…, Finally, In the end, At last;

2.表并列補(bǔ)充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also);

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對(duì)比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(從句), In spite of+n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand…,some…while others… ；

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過(guò)渡。

第五步：潤(rùn)色修改。