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6．國慶長假引發(fā)了人們對于旅游景點該不該漲價的熱議．上周你們班對此進行了一次熱烈的討論．請根據(jù)下面的討論結(jié)果完成短文．

大約90%認為不該漲價	10%認為可以適當漲價
1．旅游景點是公共資源； 2．更多的人可以享受美景； 3．漲價會增加人們的經(jīng)濟負擔．	1．景點建設(shè)及維護費用增加； 2．避免超負荷的游客量對景點造成破壞．
你的觀點：…

要求：1．詞數(shù)120左右，可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
2．詞匯：景點scenery spot；維護maintenance．
注意：開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
Last week my class had a heated discussion about whether prices of scenery spots should be raised．The students held different opinions about it．
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Answer 1

分析 本文是學生很熟悉的正反觀點類議論文，要點都已經(jīng)給出，只需要考生在個人觀點方面做發(fā)揮．個人觀點可以是：在假期里漲價，在其他時間中低價．本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時，人稱以第三人稱為主，發(fā)表個人意見時使用第一人稱．本文的要點均已給出，考生需要使用合適的連接詞把孤立的要點聯(lián)系成文．如for one thing，for another； besides，firstly，secondly，last but not least等．也要使用一些高級的詞匯詞組如 be supposed to do sth，benefit 等以提升文章的檔次分．在文章中可以適當使用一至兩句諺語如：Every coin has two sides等可以大大提高文章的文采，提高獲得高分的可能性
本文中高級句式的運用很出色，如10 percent of the students think that it is acceptable to raise the prices a little．中的形式主語；另外連接詞的運用和很到位，如For one thing，F(xiàn)or another．
亮點句型一：They think those places are public resources，which should be shared by more people．他們認為這些地方是公共資源，應(yīng)該由更多的人分享．這是一個有賓語從句和定語從句的句子．其中those places are public resources是動詞think的賓語從句；which should be shared by more people是一個非限制性定語從句，which指代前邊整個主句的意思．
亮點句型二：From my point of view，there is a balanced way that can be considered-raise prices during holidays and lower prices in other time．在我看來，有一個平衡的方式，可以考慮在節(jié)假日提高價格和其他時間降低價格．這是一個定語從句的句子，其中way是被修飾的先行詞，that can be considered-raise prices during holidays and lower prices in other time．是一個限制性定語從句．

解答 Last week my class had a heated discussion about whether prices of scenery spots should be raised．The students held different opinions about it．
About 90 percent of the students think it is not right to raise the prices of some scenery spots．They think those places are public resources，which should be shared by more people．（亮點句型一）If the prices go up too much，people will have to pay more money．Maybe some people can't afford it．【90%的人認為】
However，10 percent of the students think that it is acceptable to raise the prices a little．For one thing，construction and maintenance of scenery sports need more money．For another，raising prices can be an effective way of avoiding too many tourists rushing there in peak time．That may cause some damage to scenery spots．【10%的人認為】
From my point of view，there is a balanced way that can be considered-raise prices during holidays and lower prices in other time．（亮點句型二）【個人觀點】

點評 本文屬于提綱作文，動筆前，一定要認真分析要點，理解要點要表達的含義，不能遺漏要點，跑題偏題．平時除了加強詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當記憶一些類似的范分析部分需要寫作點撥文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果．