Question

14．假設(shè)你是陽光社區(qū)業(yè)主，你希望在小區(qū)內(nèi)增加一個(gè)小公園，從而方便老人鍛煉，兒童玩耍，并提升綠化面積．請你給業(yè)主委員會寫封建議信，100詞左右．
開頭結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear committee members，
                          ．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息給業(yè)主委員會寫封建議信，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：你希望在小區(qū)內(nèi)增加一個(gè)小公園，從而方便老人鍛煉，兒童玩耍，并提升綠化面積 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：
As is well-known to us all，it is very important to have a healthy body for everyone．（高分句型一） 句中使用As is well-known to us all，眾所周知
 I really hope that early in the morning I can see children play games in parks and there are more trees and grass．（高分句型二）句中使用that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句
 I would appreciate it if you can adopt my suggestion and I look forward to your reply as soon as possible．（高分句型三）it 為形式賓語

解答 Dear committee members，
     I'very delighted to write a letter to you．As is well-known to us all，it is very important to have a healthy body for everyone．（高分句型一）There is no doubt that we need a place to do exercise．
      In the world today，more and more people are interested in sports and games．However，there is no place in our community to take exercise．Therefore，wo do hope that our community will build a healthy park for old people to do sports and play games．We all know that sports and games can help to keep people healthy and help people to do their work better．I really hope that early in the morning I can see children play games in parks and there are more trees and grass．（高分句型二）
     I would appreciate it if you can adopt my suggestion and I look forward to your reply as soon as possible．（高分句型三）

Yours，
Li Hua．

點(diǎn)評 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．