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2．假如你是李華，是一名高中生．隨著科技的發(fā)展，iPad已成為中學生的新寵．用iPad既可以聽音樂，閱讀純文本電子書，又可玩電子游戲．請你用英語給某英語報社寫一封信，談談中學生使用iPad的情況．信的內(nèi)容必須包括以下幾點：
1、使 用iPad對學習的好處，
2、對課堂紀律和學習可能產(chǎn)生的負面影響，
3、提出自己的建議并說明理由．
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Dear Editor'，
I'm a senior high school student named Li Hua．Now many students have iPads and think it's a fashion to use them．                                             

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文   本文同時還屬于議論文，要求考生以李華的身份給某英語報社寫一封信，談談學使用iPad的情況．所以本文使用第三人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時．要點：1．使用iPad的好處：可以聽音樂放松，下載有用的學習資料，對英語學習尤其有效．2．負面影響：有學生聽音樂時，對其他同學的學習產(chǎn)生不好影響．有學生在教室里使用iPad玩游戲，不但浪費了時間而且成績還急劇下降．過多使用iPad還影響視力．3．個人建議和理由：應該好好利用iPad有利的一面，要學習下載的有用的學習材料．建議學生對于iPad的使用時間要適當控制．建議文章分成三段，三個要點各成一段．寫作時注意技巧的運用，尤其要盡量使用高級詞匯及句式以增加文章的層次．
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本篇范文結(jié)構合理，用詞地道流暢．上下文承轉(zhuǎn)自然，無中國式英語，時態(tài)和人稱使用準確無誤．文章中句式多樣，既有陳述句，也有祈使句．使用了較多的高級句式，如定語從句…which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed．分詞做狀語Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a lot of learning materials and read them on the screen．同時文章中高級詞匯使用也較多，如apparently，achieve academic success等；范文中還使用了較多的串聯(lián)才，如in my opinion，furthermore等．
Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a lot of learning materials and read them on the screen．（高分句型一）
Some students，however，bring their iPads to the classroom and listen to music without earphones，which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed．（高分句型二）
The classroom is a place for students to study，and therefore concentration is awfully needed for us to learn our lessons．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Editor，
      I'm a senior high school student named Li Hua．Now many students have iPads and think it's a fashion to use them．Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a lot of learning materials and read them on the screen．（高分句型一）Apparently，it's helpful to our study，especially to our English listening．
      Some students，however，bring their iPads to the classroom and listen to music without earphones，which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed．（高分句型二）Some of them even waste precious time in class playing video games．
      In my opinion，as students，we should make good use of iPads to help achieve academic success．The classroom is a place for students to study，and therefore concentration is awfully needed for us to learn our lessons．（高分句型三）Furthermore，the school should make a rule to guide the students to use iPads in a proper way．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．