Question

最近，校園安全成為人們廣泛關(guān)注的話題，為確保師生安全，你校決定禁止外人進(jìn)入校園。為此，學(xué)校在學(xué)生中做了一次“家長該不該進(jìn)校園及其原因”的調(diào)查。調(diào)查結(jié)果如下圖所示：

根據(jù)上圖信息，請以“Should parents be banned from entering campus?”為題，用英語寫一篇100-120個(gè)詞的短文。要求如下：
1. 簡要描述圖中的信息（包括人數(shù)比率、觀點(diǎn)及原因）；2. 談?wù)勀愕目捶ā?br />注意：文章的標(biāo)題和開頭已給出（不計(jì)詞數(shù)）。
Should parents be banned from entering campus?
Recently, campus security has become a hot issue. To ensure security, strangers are banned from entering campus by our school, and a survey has been made among the students about whether parents should be included.

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Should parents be banned from entering campus?
Recently, campus security has become a hot issue. To ensure security, strangers are banned from entering campus by our school, and a survey has been made among the students about whether parents should be included. 
According to the survey, 60℅ of the students think parents should be included because it is a rule everyone should obey. Another 25℅ subscribe to the view that there is no need for the ban as their beloved parents couldn’t be a danger to anyone. However, the rest think the guards can make a proper decision depending on certain situations.
Personally, I agree with the first. As the saying goes, to forestall is better than to amend. Proper measures should be taken before it’s too late. As for parents, they have some other ways to keep in touch with their children, like making calls or asking for teachers’ help. All in all, campus security calls for everyone’s concern and cooperation. 

試題分析：這是一篇圖表類作文，文章的標(biāo)題和開頭已經(jīng)給出。我們所要做的就是捕捉圖表中的有用信息，結(jié)合題目要求1. 簡要描述圖中的信息（包括人數(shù)比率、觀點(diǎn)及原因）；2. 談?wù)勀愕目捶▽懸黄�文章。用正確的英語把給出的要點(diǎn)表達(dá)出來。本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)比較簡略,故需要自由發(fā)揮的地方較多。需要注意不要偏離文章中心，寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，一定要契合給出的開頭結(jié)尾,不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有文采。
點(diǎn)評：句子是由詞匯組成的，而文章則是由句子組成的。遣詞造句要按照語法和習(xí)慣表達(dá)，組句成篇也要按照篇章結(jié)構(gòu)，選擇適當(dāng)?shù)牟⒘小⑦f進(jìn)、因果、轉(zhuǎn)折、條件等意義的連詞把所有表示要點(diǎn)的句子連接成文，使句與句、段與段之間意思連貫，結(jié)構(gòu)銜接，生動(dòng)、準(zhǔn)確地表達(dá)考題內(nèi)容。同時(shí)注意克服英語句子結(jié)構(gòu)的單調(diào)性，要根據(jù)表達(dá)需要而注意變換句式，這樣才能增強(qiáng)語句的表現(xiàn)力。切忌只按考題信息或線索提示，不切實(shí)際、不顧英語習(xí)慣表達(dá)的方式逐條譯出，這樣就會(huì)造成文理不通、語無倫次。只有語言地道、層次清楚、結(jié)構(gòu)合理，才能文通語順、層次分明。